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Dear my Student [이름],

A good Thursday to you! ^.^

I think you really made the right decision in moving to another place which is near to your workplace.

You are so polite to inform it to your landlord and look for a new tenant to stay in your house to replace you.

I think you really like give-and-take relationship.

Am I right? Hahaha! ^^

Anyway, I agree with what you have said about hotels.

However, in my case, the first thing I really consider when I stay in a hotel is the service.

I think if a hotel offers a good service, the cleanliness of its rooms follows.

That\'s all for now! ^^

Happy reading! ^^,

See you later! ^^.

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear my Teacher Paula,
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Good morning!
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I decided to move to another house and informed my decision to my landlord yesterday.
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>> OR: I decided to move to another house and informed my landlord about it yesterday.

The reason for doing so is that I want to enjoy a better life.
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As you know, my house where I am here is far from my workplace, and it takes one hour and ten minutes to get there.
>> As you know, my house where I am now is far from my workplace, and it takes one hour and ten minutes to get there. (C1 It is better to remove HERE.)

>> OR: As you know, my house where I am living now is far from my workplace, and it takes one hour and ten minutes for me to get to work.

In addition, I badly want to have nice surroundings, but my current place can\'t fulfill my urge.
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There are a lot of steakhouses near my house, and they exhale smoke constantly.
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>> OR: There are a lot of steakhouses near my house, and they produce smoke constantly.

Apart from them, these days, some cockroaches are showing up, so I can\'t bear these terrible surroundings.
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>> OR: Apart from this reason, these days, some cockroaches are showing up, so I can\'t stand this terrible environment.

I have lived here for 5 years, and I haven\'t seen those cockroaches roaming my house before, but these days, suddenly, they started to show up.

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I asked my landlord why this situation happened to my house, and he said a guy who lived in room 403 moved out one month ago, and his place was a den of cockroaches.
>> I asked my landlord why this situation has happened to my house, and he said a guy who lived in room 403 moved out one month ago, and his place was a den of cockroaches. (C2 When you use HAPPENED, it means that the situation won\'t happen in the present and future, so I replaced the expression with HAS HAPPENED.)

Maybe, those cockroaches lived in that room seemed to move out to other rooms to find something to eat, including my place.
>> CORRECT! (INCLUDING MY PLACE is like your place is something that cockroaches can eat.

>> BETTER: Maybe, those cockroaches lived in that room seemed to move out to other rooms to find something to eat, including moving to my place.

Above all, my house doesn\'t have a good ventilation system, so wallpaper used to be covered with mold during the rainy season.
>> Above all, my house doesn\'t have a good ventilation system, so my place\'s wallpaper is used to be covered with mold during the rainy season. (C3 You should add something before WALLPAPER to make is specific. C4 USED TO is used only for past, so it should be IS USED TO.)

When I think about those weaknesses of my place, I seemed to make a right decision, but when it comes to a budget for new house, worrying is

the first thing I do.
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From now on, I have to focus on looking for a cheap and nice house.
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Good luck to me! ^^
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Anyway, that is all for today and see you very soon!
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[이름]
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P.S.: Below is my homework today.
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The most important things that a good hotel should have are a reasonable price, a kind service and room hygiene.
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Price is an important factor when we choose a hotel.
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If the price is high, of course, it will be hard to stay.
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Service also should satisfy customers who visit a hotel.
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If the quality of service is low, no matter how good a hotel is, I would not want to visit there again.
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Lastly, hotel should make people feel at home.
>> Lastly, hotels should make people feel at home. (C5 HOTEL should be HOTELS since you are giving a general information.)

It is essential for hotel to take care of rooms hygienically.

>> It is essential for a hotel to take care of its rooms hygienically. (C6 You forgot to put A before HOTEL.)