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Good morning, Erine! I just checked your corrections about my composition yesterday and I want to say thank you. I'd like to ask you to explain more about why I can't use 'that' before 'I got from the Internet'. Those are the information that I got from the website. >> Those are the information I got from the Internet. By the way, I tasted a [이름]chi that I made last weekend but it was not salty enough. Well, I need to consider what I should do to make it more delicious. That is all for today and see you tomorrow! *Essay Question: How important are computers in the classroom? These days, we can't live apart from computers. All things are managed by the computer and it makes us more convenience. We can say that it is already considered as an indispensable part of our lives. Because of that reason, our young generation is requested to learn that since early years and it is a very common situation. However, we can't hardly think of the side effects. The more early they can be opened by the computer, the more easily they can be exposed by bad things. Now, computers are a very important tool for us to learn a variety of information in the classroom. Since we can't live without the computer, our schools need to teach them on how to use it wisely.

Happy Wednesday again, [이름]!^^ This composition has a lot of explanation and I want to apologize if I wasn\'t able to explain the other one well. Anyhow, if you have other corrections to ask, just feel free to do so. Thank you so much for being open.^^ Take care!^^ ~~Teacher Erine~~ Good morning, Erine! >> CorrectI just checked your corrections about my composition yesterday and I want to say thank you. >> CorrectI\'d like to ask you to explain more about why I can\'t use \'that\' before \'I got from the Internet\'. >> Correct >> Incorect: What I gathered from the internet, Jeepney can load 15~55 and it depends on its size. >> Correct: What I gathered from the internet is: First, jeepney can load 15~55 and it depends on its size. >> Here, we have the verb \"is\" which makes the noun clause complete and it is followed by another sentence which makes it a complex-compund sentence. We have to use a verb and not a comma if we are going to use a noun clause in your sentence. Those are the information that I got from the website. >> Those are the information I got from the Internet. >> Correct. (In this case, we are not talking about a specific website. If you are talking about searching or defining something, we mostly use \"the Internet\" and not the \"the website\" since it is pertaining to a general thought.)By the way, I tasted a [이름]chi that I made last weekend but it was not salty enough. >> By the way, I tasted [이름]chi that I made last weekend but it was not salty enough.Well, I need to consider what I should do to make it more delicious. >> CorrectThat is all for today and see you tomorrow! >> Correct*Essay Question: How important are computers in the classroom?These days, we can\'t live apart from computers. >> CorrectAll things are managed by the computer and it makes us more convenience. >> All things are managed by computers and it gives us more convenience. (Use the general form \"computers\" for the sentence. The second one needs the proper usage of your vocabulary.) We can say that it is already considered as an indispensable part of our lives. >> CorrectBecause of that reason, our young generation is requested to learn that since early years and it is a very common situation. >> Correct However, we can\'t hardly think of the side effects. >> CorrectThe more early they can be opened by the computer, the more easily they can be exposed by bad things. >> The earlier they can be opened/informed about computers, the more easily they can be exposed to bad things.Now, computers are a very important tool for us to learn a variety of information in the classroom. >> CorrectSince we can\'t live without the computer, our schools need to teach them on how to use it wisely. >> Since we can\'t live without computers, our schools need to teach them on how to use it wisely.