Composition

Good morning, Erine! First of all, thanks for sharing your personal story with me. I somehow felt that we are getting close to each other. I also have a same situation with you so I found a similarity in the way you think. Well, I will share my life story with you when I have a chance someday. ^^ I hope you don't have a Monday sickness and have a great day! See you! *Essay Today's top professional athletes often have salaries and bonuses in the tens of millions of dollars. Do you think these athletes deserve such high compensation? In my opinion, being a professional athlete requires hard work and effort. It takes excruciating effort to reach the top. Generally, they only focus their efforts in their areas without any backup plans. They are willing to devote their lives to become a top professional athlete and sacrifice everything. It is like a gambling so no one can chose this way easily. They finally survived among many challengers and of course, they deserve high compensation. When it comes to the amount that they receive, I also think it is a little bit high. However, it depends on a decision from a team that he or she belongs to. Because of his or her skill and popularity, the team can make a lot of profit. It is a win-win situation. Well, if we think of it as an economic logic, there is nothing abnormal about the compensation.

Hi there, [이름]!^^ Honestly speaking, I don\'t usually say things about my personal life. It is just now that I do it. Maybe because I am comfortable telling you because you are a good listener!^^ But I want to apologize if I am a bit talkative. By the way, I don\'t have Monday sickness, but Thursday sickness.^^ I will be fine and I hope you will, too!^^ ~~Teacher Erine~~ Good morning, Erine! >> CorrectFirst of all, thanks for sharing your personal story with me. >> CorrectI somehow felt that we are getting close to each other. >> CorrectI also have a same situation with you so I found a similarity in the way you think. >> I also have the same situation so I found a similarity with the way you think. (We use \"the\" with \"same\" all the time. The next correction is about the use of preposition.)Well, I will share my life story with you when I have a chance someday. ^^ >> CorrectI hope you don\'t have a Monday sickness and have a great day! >> CorrectSee you! >> Correct*Essay Today\'s top professional athletes often have salaries and bonuses in the tens of millions of dollars. Do you think these athletes deserve such high compensation? In my opinion, being a professional athlete requires hard work and effort. >> Correct It takes excruciating effort to reach the top. >> CorrectGenerally, they only focus their efforts in their areas without any backup plans. >> Generally, they only focus on their efforts in their areas without any backup plans.They are willing to devote their lives to become a top professional athlete and sacrifice everything. >> CorrectIt is like a gambling so no one can chose this way easily. >> It is like gambling so no one can choose this way easily. (Gambling is considered an uncountable noun. Can is followed by a base form of a verb.)They finally survived among many challengers and of course, they deserve high compensation. >> They finally survived against many challengers and of course, they deserve high compensation. (Use of preposition)When it comes to the amount that they receive, I also think it is a little bit high. >> CorrectHowever, it depends on a decision from a team that he or she belongs to. >> CorrectBecause of his or her skill and popularity, the team can make a lot of profit. >> CorrectIt is a win-win situation. >> CorrectWell, if we think of it as an economic logic, there is nothing abnormal about the compensation. >> Correct