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2015-11-20 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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A happy Friday to you, Erine! Today, we talked about the weather there and here and I gave you a small tip in keeping warm. I researched the reason why wearing many thin clothes will be more helpful than a layer of thick clothing in keeping out the cold. When we wear many layers of thin clothes, air-layer will be made between a body skin and clothing. We usually call it 'Standstill Air-layer' and it will function to prevent the heat and the moisture between layers from being radiated. It means that the more thin clothes we wear, the more air-layers we can get and keep for a long time. Moreover, according to the change of the weather condition, we can put off or on our clothing easily. It is a kind of scientific logic so if we follow it well, we can get through winter warmly. Through today's research, I also learned about the logic that I didn't know before in detail. There is one more tip about keeping warm. You should make your neck and shoulder keep warm because a cold will go in your body through the two parts. It may be nothing but small things always lead to big things. Anyway, wish you to have a wonderful weekend and see you next Monday! ^^

강사 첨삭

[이름], All I can say is you have been very helpful!^^ I am so pleased to know this information and I can\'t contain my feelings. It just made my day!^^ Now, I know what to do when I feel cold. This is what I call, \"learning\". Thank you teacher!^^ ~~Teacher Erine~~ A happy Friday to you, Erine! >> CorrectToday, we talked about the weather there and here and I gave you a small tip in keeping warm. >> Today, we talked about the weather here and there and I gave you a small tip about keeping yourself warm. (Preposition usage and expression here and there)I researched the reason why wearing many thin clothes will be more helpful than a layer of thick clothing in keeping out the cold. >> Correct When we wear many layers of thin clothes, air-layer will be made between a body skin and clothing. >> Correct We usually call it \'Standstill Air-layer\' and it will function to prevent the heat and the moisture between layers from being radiated. >> CorrectIt means that the more thin clothes we wear, the more air-layers we can get and keep for a long time. >> Correct Moreover, according to the change of the weather condition, we can put off or on our clothing easily. >> Correct It is a kind of scientific logic so if we follow it well, we can get through winter warmly. >> Correct Through today\'s research, I also learned about the logic that I didn\'t know before in detail. >> Correct There is one more tip about keeping warm. >> Correct You should make your neck and shoulder keep warm because a cold will go in your body through the two parts. >> Correct It may be nothing but small things always lead to big things. >> Correct Anyway, wish you to have a wonderful weekend and see you next Monday! ^^ >> Correct

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