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2015-12-07 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good day, Teacher! I didn't want to go to work today and just wanted to rest more. Many tasks are waiting for me but I am refusing to face that. ^^;; As you said, we are back to our reality today and need to start it again. Anyway, I hope you can totally get over your cough very soon! ^^~ Take care and see you! *Essay If it were up to you to choose one professional (a doctor, a reporter, a scientist, a politician, an actor) to travel aboard the next space station, who would you choose? If I could choose one professional among them, I would choose an actor. The reason why I don't want to be with other professionals is as follows. At first sight, a doctor and scientist seem to be very useful when it comes to our safe. However, if they don't have equipment to make their skills efficient, their abilities are useless in space. As for a reporter and politician, they look like they would be boring me. They just would seem to like talking to me about hard subjects. If I could travel to space, I wouldn't go back to Earth in a short period of time. In this case, I would want to be with an actor who is really witty and funny so can make me happy and laughing.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! I know you have been worried for weeks because of my cough and I appreciate your concern regarding my condition. But don\'t you worry because I will try my best to be better!^^ Thank you for sharing your opinion, too, regarding our topic!^^ Find time to rest, OK? ~~Teacher Erine~~ Good day, Teacher! >> CorrectI didn\'t want to go to work today and just wanted to rest more. >> CorrectMany tasks are waiting for me but I am refusing to face that. ^^;; >> CorrectAs you said, we are back to our reality today and need to start it again. >> CorrectAnyway, I hope you can totally get over your cough very soon! ^^~ >>  CorrectTake care and see you! >> Correct*Essay If it were up to you to choose one professional (a doctor, a reporter, a scientist, a politician, an actor) to travel aboard the next space station, who would you choose?If I could choose one professional among them, I would choose an actor. >> If I could choose one professional among them, I would choose to be with an actor. (Sentence patterns) The reason why I don\'t want to be with other professionals is as follows. >> CorrectAt first sight, a doctor and scientist seem to be very useful when it comes to our safe. >> At first sight, a doctor and scientist seem to be very useful when it comes to our safety. (Noun vs. adjective) However, if they don\'t have equipment to make their skills efficient, their abilities are useless in space. >> CorrectAs for a reporter and politician, they look like they would be boring me. >> CorrectThey just would seem to like talking to me about hard subjects. >> CorrectIf I could travel to space, I wouldn\'t go back to Earth in a short period of time. >> CorrectIn this case, I would want to be with an actor who is really witty and funny so can make me happy and laughing. >> In this case, I would want to be with an actor who is really witty and funny so he or she can make me happy and laugh out loud. (Sentence patterns: make me happy and make me laugh out loud.)

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