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2015-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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A good day to you, Teacher! Today, I am sorry to see you coughing and worried about your throat condition. I also experienced that for a while so I can understand what you feel. I hope you can totally recover from your cough very soon! ^^ Take care and see you tomorrow! *Essay All across the country, state laws require drivers to wear seatbelts. Not everyone believes the use of seatbelts should be mandatory. What do you think? Make a case for or against mandatory seatbelt use. In my opinion, wearing seatbelts must be mandatory in order to keep our precious lives safe. Hear in Korea, we are also required to wear seatbelts and it is defined by law. A few years ago, a driver and a front-seat passenger were only requested to wear that but nowadays, all passengers including back-seat people are requested to fasten their seatbelts by law. If we don't follow that, we will be punished with a fine of USD 30. The reason why our government gives importance to this is because wearing seatbelts will protect us from car accidents. As we already know, seatbelts will prevent us from being thrown forward under the influence of a terrible crash. If we don't use it, our body might go through a windscreen by inertia and we will lose our lives easily. That is why we should follow the law all the time. It is late for us to regret after things happen.

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Good morning, [이름]!^^ I apologize about what had happened during our class. It wasn\'t my intention to cough that hard. I even hated it. But thanks for your concern. I will be fine soon. Take care!^^~~Teacher Erine~~ A good day to you, Teacher! >> CorrectToday, I am sorry to see you coughing and worried about your throat condition. >> Today, I am sorry to see you coughing and I worried about your throat condition. (Two independent clauses)I also experienced that for a while so I can understand what you feel. >> Correct I hope you can totally recover from your cough very soon! ^^ >> CorrectTake care and see you tomorrow! >> Correct*EssayAll across the country, state laws require drivers to wear seatbelts. Not everyone believes the use of seatbelts should be mandatory. What do you think? Make a case for or against mandatory seatbelt use. In my opinion, wearing seatbelts must be mandatory in order to keep our precious lives safe. >> CorrectHear in Korea, we are also required to wear seatbelts and it is defined by law. >> CorrectA few years ago, a driver and a front-seat passenger were only requested to wear that but nowadays, all passengers including back-seat people are requested to fasten their seatbelts by law. >> CorrectIf we don\'t follow that, we will be punished with a fine of USD 30. >> CorrectThe reason why our government gives importance to this is because wearing seatbelts will protect us from car accidents. >> CorrectAs we already know, seatbelts will prevent us from being thrown forward under the influence of a terrible crash. >> CorrectIf we don\'t use it, our body might go through a windscreen by inertia and we will lose our lives easily. >> CorrectThat is why we should follow the law all the time. >> CorrectIt is late for us to regret after things happen. >>Correct

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