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2015-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Dear my Teacher, A happy Friday to you! As an extension of our class, I hadn't planned going abroad this month but I suddenly found cheap flight tickets so I could put it in action. Actually, I made a plan to go to Bangkok alone in last October but because of my movement I couldn't help to cancel my schedule and I needed to pay a cancel charge of USD 100 at that time. Now, since I already got tickets I just can follow the list that I made in detail before. In order for me not to regret, I will enjoy my life to the fullest. Anyway, I hope your cough will not affect you to go to the beach during a holiday in this month. Well, I am sure that you will get a really nice gift from Santa. Have a nice weekend! ^^ *Essay When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. I think the best way for students to get along with each other well is that a teacher provides a bonding time to them. During this time, they are getting to know about individual traits and it will remove a sense of awkwardness among them. Understanding each other is the most important factor to make a good relationship and it will make students open to a stranger who just moves to a new school. Nowadays, a lot of students like stay alone and it will lead to them not to be willing to get close to others. In this situation, if no one wants to come forward, there is a possibility for a few students to be left behind. That is why teachers' role is very important in school life.

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Good morning, my dear [이름]! Everyday, you are extending your concerns about my health condition and I can\'t take you enough. I am trying my best to be ok so that you wouldn\'t be worried anymore. In addition, I am so happy that you are going to live to the fullest.^^ Don\'t regret and enjoy your trip by that time!^^ ~~Teacher Erine~~ Dear my Teacher, >> CorrectA happy Friday to you! >> Correct As an extension of our class, I hadn\'t planned going abroad this month but I suddenly found cheap flight tickets so I could put it in action. >> CorrectActually, I made a plan to go to Bangkok alone in last October but because of my movement I couldn\'t help to cancel my schedule and I needed to pay a cancel charge of USD 100 at that time. >> Actually, I made a plan to go to Bangkok alone last October but because of my movement to another place I couldn\'t help to cancel my schedule and I needed to pay a cancel charge of USD 100 at that time. Now, since I already got tickets I just can follow the list that I made in detail before. >> CorrectIn order for me not to regret, I will enjoy my life to the fullest. >> CorrectAnyway, I hope your cough will not affect you to go to the beach during a holiday in this month. >> CorrectWell, I am sure that you will get a really nice gift from Santa. >> CorrectHave a nice weekend! ^^ >> Correct*Essay When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.I think the best way for students to get along with each other well is that a teacher provides a bonding time to them. >> I think the best way for students to get along with each other well is that a teacher provides a bonding time for them. During this time, they are getting to know about individual traits and it will remove a sense of awkwardness among them. >> During this time, they can get to know about their individual traits and it will remove the sense of awkwardness among them.Understanding each other is the most important factor to make a good relationship and it will make students open to a stranger who just moves to a new school. >> Understanding each other is the most important factor to make a good relationship and it will make students be open to a stranger who just moved to a new school. Nowadays, a lot of students like stay alone and it will lead to them not to be willing to get close to others. >> Nowadays, a lot of students like to stay alone and it will lead to them to a situation where they are not willing to meet others.In this situation, if no one wants to come forward, there is a possibility for a few students to be left behind. >> Correct That is why teachers\' role is very important in school life. >> Correct

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