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2016-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good evening, Erine! I finished my tasks already but somehow, I don't want to go home. I am in the office now and having a cup of latte and a sandwich. Yes, it is my dinner. You might be aware of my current feelings because you also live alone. Even if I go home no one greets me so I sometimes feel a kind of blank space. Moreover, my house is very cold so it made me go home late. ^^;; Of course, sometimes, I like this situation that I feel free right after finishing my work. Now, I am listening to music over the radio and it sounds very sweet. Music, a cup of coffee and a quiet place are a perfect combination at this moment. If I go home now it will take me 40 minutes. After getting home, I will do what I usually do such as exercise and watching news on TV. It seems like a little boring. ^^;; Well, that is life. KKK Anyway, I hope you won't have a fitful sleep tonight! ^^ See you tomorrow!

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!^^ I know how you felt last night. I have always been feeling that, too. However, having a sandwich at night is not always good. Though you eat alone, it doesn\'t mean you won\'t eat the right food as well. Yes, I am scolding you. kkk I\'m just kidding. I just care. See you later. ~~Teacher Erine~~ Good evening, Erine! >> CorrectI finished my tasks already but somehow, I don\'t want to go home. >> Correct I am in the office now and having a cup of latte and a sandwich. >> CorrectYes, it is my dinner. >> CorrectYou might be aware of my current feelings because you also live alone. >> CorrectEven if I go home no one greets me so I sometimes feel a kind of blank space. >> CorrectMoreover, my house is very cold so it made me go home late. ^^;; >> Correct Of course, sometimes, I like this situation that I feel free right after finishing my work. >> CorrectNow, I am listening to music over the radio and it sounds very sweet. >> CorrectMusic, a cup of coffee and a quiet place are a perfect combination at this moment. >> Music, a cup of coffee and a quiet place make a perfect combination at this moment. (better use an action verb) If I go home now it will take me 40 minutes. >> CorrectAfter getting home, I will do what I usually do such as exercise and watching news on TV. >> After getting home, I will do what I usually do such as exercising and watching news on TV. (The same forms should be applied.)It seems like a little boring. ^^;; >> It seems like it is a little boring.Well, that is life. KKK>> Correct Anyway, I hope you won\'t have a fitful sleep tonight! ^^ >> CorrectSee you tomorrow! >> Correct

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