Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
Good evening, Erine!
I finished my tasks already but somehow, I don't want to go home.
I am in the office now and having a cup of latte and a sandwich.
Yes, it is my dinner.
You might be aware of my current feelings because you also live alone.
Even if I go home no one greets me so I sometimes feel a kind of blank space.
Moreover, my house is very cold so it made me go home late. ^^;;
Of course, sometimes, I like this situation that I feel free right after finishing my work.
Now, I am listening to music over the radio and it sounds very sweet.
Music, a cup of coffee and a quiet place are a perfect combination at this moment.
If I go home now it will take me 40 minutes.
After getting home, I will do what I usually do such as exercise and watching news on TV.
It seems like a little boring. ^^;;
Well, that is life. KKK
Anyway, I hope you won't have a fitful sleep tonight! ^^
See you tomorrow!
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!^^
I know how you felt last night. I have always been feeling that, too.
However, having a sandwich at night is not always good. Though you eat alone,
it doesn\'t mean you won\'t eat the right food as well.
Yes, I am scolding you. kkk
I\'m just kidding. I just care.
See you later.
~~Teacher Erine~~
Good evening, Erine!
>> CorrectI finished my tasks already but somehow, I don\'t want to go home. >> Correct
I am in the office now and having a cup of latte and a sandwich.
>> CorrectYes, it is my dinner.
>> CorrectYou might be aware of my current feelings because you also live alone.
>> CorrectEven if I go home no one greets me so I sometimes feel a kind of blank space.
>> CorrectMoreover, my house is very cold so it made me go home late. ^^;;
>> Correct Of course, sometimes, I like this situation that I feel free right after finishing my work.
>> CorrectNow, I am listening to music over the radio and it sounds very sweet.
>> CorrectMusic, a cup of coffee and a quiet place are a perfect combination at this moment. >> Music, a cup of coffee and a quiet place make a perfect combination at this moment. (better use an action verb)
If I go home now it will take me 40 minutes.
>> CorrectAfter getting home, I will do what I usually do such as exercise and watching news on TV.
>> After getting home, I will do what I usually do such as exercising and watching news on TV. (The same forms should be applied.)It seems like a little boring. ^^;;
>> It seems like it is a little boring.Well, that is life. KKK>> Correct
Anyway, I hope you won\'t have a fitful sleep tonight! ^^
>> CorrectSee you tomorrow!
>> Correct
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