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2016-04-05 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! I just registered my class again but you can find that my class time is shorter than current one. Because of the change of my company regulation, the support for employees has been reduced. However, I am still lucky to keep on study English with you and I am contented with this situation. By the way, my boyfriend and I set off to see the west sea last Saturday. When it comes to the west side of Korea, we can see the wonderful sunset and enjoy the mudflat. On the first day, we dug out a lot of clams at the mudflat for three hours. On the second day, we had a severe muscle pain because of the labor of yesterday. However, we could not waste our precious time so we decided to go to a mountain to see a waterfall. Even though we felt very tired before going up, the fresh air and wonderful view made us feel relaxed after reaching at the top of the mountain. Now, I am still suffering from my muscle pain but if I were given a chance to experience the mudflat again, I would't hesitate to do it. Anyway, have a great time and see you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

[이름], very well explained!^^
While I was reading your homework,

I could imagine what had happened during

your trip!^^

I felt like I was with you at that time. Now, I

have my muscle pain, too!^^

kkkk

I am still very lucky, whether you have short or longer time, to have

you in my class.
See you tomorrow!^^
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 I just registered my class again but you can find that my class time is shorter than current one.

>> Correct
 Because of the change of my company regulation, the support for employees has been reduced.

>> Correct
 However, I am still lucky to keep on study English with you and I am contented with this situation. 

>> However, I am still lucky to keep on studying English with you and I am contented with this situation. 
 By the way, my boyfriend and I set off to see the west sea last Saturday.

>> Correct
 When it comes to the west side of Korea, we can see the wonderful sunset and enjoy the mudflat. 

>> Correct
 On the first day, we dug out a lot of clams at the mudflat for three hours

>> Correct.
On the second day, we had a severe muscle pain because of the labor of yesterday.

>> Correct
 However, we could not waste our precious time so we decided to go to a mountain to see a waterfall. 

>> Correct
 Even though we felt very tired before going up, the fresh air and wonderful view made us feel relaxed after reaching at the top of the mountain. 

>> Correct
 Now, I am still suffering from my muscle pain but if I were given a chance to experience the mudflat again, I would\'t hesitate to do it. 

>> Correct
 Anyway, have a great time and see you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct

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