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2016-04-28 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good morning, Teacher! I had my mobile phone fixed yesterday and the problem was really related to the all-in-one battery. My phone is now working well. I felt very frustrated with the high price of new one but now, I don't need to buy new one. I think I can use it more than a year. In my case, I only use it for searching news and chatting with friends so I don't need to have a new one with a high specification. If I use a new one with a high specification, I have to pay high communication expense so it is waste of money. I am lucky to have my mobile phone fixed and use it again. Anyway, you are going to leave the office soon, aren't you. See you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hello and Thursday morning, [이름]!^^

Congratulations for making your phone last longer!^^

I hope it won\'t have any problems anymore.

Thank you also for informing me about the relationship of having

a phone with high specs and the expense of using it. I didn\'t know about it!^^
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 I had my mobile phone fixed yesterday and the problem was really related to the all-in-one battery. 

>> Correct
 My phone is now working well. 

>> Correct
 I felt very frustrated with the high price of new one but now, I don\'t need to buy new one. 

>> Correct
 I think I can use it more than a year. 

>> Correct 
In my case, I only use it for searching news and chatting with friends so I don\'t need to have a new one with a high specification. 

>> Correct
 If I use a new one with a high specification, I have to pay high communication expense so it is waste of money. 

>> Correct
 I am lucky to have my mobile phone fixed and use it again.

>> Correct 
Anyway, you are going to leave the office soon, aren\'t you. 

>> Correct
 See you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct

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