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2016-04-28 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! These days, I am sleepy in the mornings. I guess it might be a spring fatigue. In order to get rid of it, I am drinking a cup of iced coffee. I know it won't work on me but it is better than I don't do anything. By the way, next Thursday is Childcare's Day so our government has decided to make next Friday an temporary holiday. Because of this sudden decision, we can take 4 days holiday next week. The purpose that our government made this decision is to boost our economy. Moreover, to gain the popularity from the citizens, our government suddenly designated it as an temporary holiday. However, many workers are still unable to take a rest on that day because this temporary holiday is not mandatory. It means that it depends on the discretion of the employer. Luckily, our boss already announced that we would have a holiday on that day. How about you there in Power English? Have you already known about this news? I hope Power English will also follow our government's decision for all teachers there. That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!^^
Thank you for informing me about the schedule!^^

I think you are now planning on how to spend you holiday.

But I hope you will still be able to talk to me by then.

Let\'s continue talking about this tomorrow!^^
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 These days, I am sleepy in the mornings. 

>> Correct
 I guess it might be a spring fatigue.

>> Correct
 In order to get rid of it, I am drinking a cup of iced coffee. 

>> Correct
 I know it won\'t work on me but it is better than I don\'t do anything.

>> Correct
 By the way, next Thursday is Childcare\'s Day so our government has decided to make next Friday an temporary holiday. 

>>  By the way, next Thursday is Childcare\'s Day so our government has decided to make next Friday a temporary holiday. 
 Because of this sudden decision, we can take 4 days holiday next week. 

>> Correct [Good for you and not for us!kk]
 The purpose that our government made this decision is to boost our economy.

>> The purpose of the decision our government made is to boost our economy.
 Moreover, to gain the popularity from the citizens, our government suddenly designated it as an temporary holiday.

>> Moreover, to gain the popularity from the citizens, our government suddenly designated it as a temporary holiday.
 However, many workers are still unable to take a rest on that day because this temporary holiday is not mandatory.

>> Correct
 It means that it depends on the discretion of the employer.

>> Correct

 Luckily, our boss already announced that we would have a holiday on that day. 

>> Correct [Congratulations!^^]
 How about you there in Power English?

>> Correct [We will follow the holiday on Thursday.]
 Have you already known about this news? 

>> Correct
 I hope Power English will also follow our government\'s decision for all teachers there.

>> Correct
 That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct 

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