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2016-05-09 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! During my holiday, I abused my body. Hehehe! On the first day, I went climbing. There were a lot of big rocks so these made me feel scared and thrilled when I climb them. On the second day, I went to an indoor rock climbing gym because of the rainy weather. After doing it, I had a heavy muscle pain in my back and arms for 3 days. On the third day, I went to the river side to ride a bicycle. To remove my muscle pain, I thought that I'd rather exercise than do nothing. On the last day, I went to mountain again. It was very sunny so I was able to see the beautiful view of the city from the top. After going back home, I had to clean my room even though I was very exhausted. Because of my busy schedule during my holiday, I was unable to take care of my place so it was very dirty.^^;; Now, I somehow have a Monday sickness. I wish I could work only for 4 days a week. Hehehe! Anyway, I am sorry for being absent last Friday. ^^;; See you tomorrow!

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
Now I can say that you really had a very busy schedule!^^

Thank you for sharing anyway!^^ I was very happy to know

your activities last time.

If you can\'t endure the pain, try to take a pain killer.

It will help you a lot!
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 During my holiday, I abused my body. Hehehe!

>> Correct
 On the first day, I went climbing.

>> Correct
 There were a lot of big rocks so these made me feel scared and thrilled when I climb them. 

>> Correct
 On the second day, I went to an indoor rock climbing gym because of the rainy weather.

>> Correct
 After doing it, I had a heavy muscle pain in my back and arms for 3 days.

>>  After doing it, I had a terrible back pain and muscle pain in arms for 3 days.
 On the third day, I went to the river side to ride a bicycle.

>> Correct
 To remove my muscle pain, I thought that I\'d rather exercise than do nothing. 

>> Correct 
On the last day, I went to mountain again. 

>> Correct
 It was very sunny so I was able to see the beautiful view of the city from the top.

>> Correct
 After going back home, I had to clean my room even though I was very exhausted. 

>> Correct 
Because of my busy schedule during my holiday, I was unable to take care of my place so it was very dirty.^^;; 

>> Correct
 Now, I somehow have a Monday sickness. 

>> Correct
 I wish I could work only for 4 days a week. Hehehe! 

>> Correct
 Anyway, I am sorry for being absent last Friday. ^^;;

>> Correct
 See you tomorrow!

>> Correct

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