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2016-05-19 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! Today, we talked about jujube and our time was too short to talk more about its information. It is not common for young generation to eat this jujube even if it has a lot of benefits for people. Nowadays, it is almost considered as an old food and only our older generation enjoys having it. We can have it in many forms. First, we can have it in a form of real fruit. However, it tastes a little bit bitter and bland so it is not attractive. That is why we usually make it dry to make it more rich in flavor. Second, we can have it after boiling. It is the most convenient way for us to have it healthily in this busy society. We can find instant tea bags for sale in markets. Even if it is artificial, it is still good rather than drinking other beverages. Finally, it is usually used when we hold a ancestral ceremony. When we prepare foods for ancestral rites table, it is indispensable. I have no idea why it is indispensable but I think it contains some auspicious meanings. Anyway, that is all for today and see you tomorrow!

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!^^
Our conversation was indeed informative.

However, like what you said, our time was too short

for me to get to know more about this fruit.

However, if I had a chance, I would like to try to taste

every kind of it.^^
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
 Today, we talked about jujube and our time was too short to talk more about its information. 

>>Correct
 It is not common for young generation to eat this jujube even if it has a lot of benefits for people. 

>>Correct
 Nowadays, it is almost considered as an old food and only our older generation enjoys having it. 

>>Correct
 We can have it in many forms. 

>>Correct
 First, we can have it in a form of real fruit. 

>>Correct
 However, it tastes a little bit bitter and bland so it is not attractive. 

>>Correct
 That is why we usually make it dry to make it more rich in flavor. 

>>Correct
 Second, we can have it after boiling. 

>>Correct
 It is the most convenient way for us to have it healthily in this busy society. 

>>Correct
 We can find instant tea bags for sale in markets. 

>>Correct
 Even if it is artificial, it is still good rather than drinking other beverages. 

>>Correct
 Finally, it is usually used when we hold a ancestral ceremony. 

>>Finally, it is usually used when we hold an ancestral ceremony.
 When we prepare foods for ancestral rites table, it is indispensable.

>>When we prepare foods for the table during the ancestral rites, it is indispensable.
 I have no idea why it is indispensable but I think it contains some auspicious meanings. 

>>Correct 
Anyway, that is all for today and see you tomorrow!

>>Correct

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