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2016-05-25 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good morning, Teacher! Today, we suddenly talked about medical vocabularies. I think the medical vocabulary always makes me feel frustrated. When it comes to 'obsessive compulsive disorder', I already understood the meaning. These days, a lot of people suffer from this disease because of stresses from study, child care and work. Especially, people who intend to prefer to become perfect or feel responsible strongly in doing something are attacked by this disease. The biggest factor is a sense of anxiety. Since we have this kind of feelings, we usually do the same action repetitively in order to avoid nervous situations. If this situations last longer and disturb our daily lives, it proves that we have attacked by this disease. In this competitive society, we are exposed by this kind of disease easily so we should try to make ourselves relaxed. I know it is hard, but it is the best way for us to overcome it. That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!^^
Good thing to hear you already understood the idea of

being \"OC\". That is the shorter term for it.

Luckily, I\'m not like that!^^
kkk

See you then, [이름]!^^
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 Today, we suddenly talked about medical vocabularies.

>> Correct
 I think the medical vocabulary always makes me feel frustrated.

>> Correct
 When it comes to \'obsessive compulsive disorder\', I already understood the meaning. 

>> Correct
 These days, a lot of people suffer from this disease because of stresses from study, child care and work. 

>> These days, a lot of people suffer from this disease because of stressors from studying, child care and work.
 Especially, people who intend to prefer to become perfect or feel responsible strongly in doing something are attacked by this disease. 

>> Correct
 The biggest factor is a sense of anxiety.

>> Correct
 Since we have this kind of feelings, we usually do the same action repetitively in order to avoid nervous situations.

>> Correct
 If this situations last longer and disturb our daily lives, it proves that we have attacked by this disease. 

>> If these situations last longer and disturb our daily lives, it may prove that we have been attacked by this disease.
 In this competitive society, we are exposed by this kind of disease easily so we should try to make ourselves relaxed. 

>> In this competitive society, we are exposed to this kind of disease easily so we should try to make ourselves relaxed.
 I know it is hard, but it is the best way for us to overcome it. 

>> Correct
 That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^

>> Correct

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