Composition

2016-06-13 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, Teacher! I got back to the office after having lunch. Indeed, I have a lot of tasks that I have to finish within this day because our Chinese coworkers started work today. Even if it is not a peak season these days, but there are a lot of tasks that piled up for two days. Suddenly, I wish I could escape from this real world and travel around the world right now. Actually, my boyfriend and I have discussed about this plan but we haven't put our thoughts into action. In this kind of repetitive lives, we have been unable to find any purposes to live. Well, I think it seems like we still lack our courage for giving up material well-being. On the other hand, I think that If I went out of this real world and were freed , would I want to go back to this realistic world in a few years again? Whatever I choose, the most important thing is not to be regretful for what I did. I suddenly became philosophical. Don't be influenced by me and see you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭




Hello, philosopher [이름]!^^

kkk

I just want to say that there are some Mondays

that you become a philosopher. However,

you make me think about things in life.

You don\'t influence me, though, you mesmerize

me with your thoughts!^^
Thank you!
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good afternoon, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 I got back to the office after having lunch. 

>> Correct
 Indeed, I have a lot of tasks that I have to finish within this day because our Chinese coworkers started work today. 

>> Correct
 Even if it is not a peak season these days, but there are a lot of tasks that piled up for two days. 

>>  Even if it is not a peak season these days, there are a lot of tasks that are piled up for two days. 
 Suddenly, I wish I could escape from this real world and travel around the world right now. 

>> Correct
 Actually, my boyfriend and I have discussed about this plan but we haven\'t put our thoughts into action. 

>> Correct
 In this kind of repetitive lives, we have been unable to find any purposes to live. 

>> In this kind of life which has repetitive routines, we have been unable to find any purposes to live.
 Well, I think it seems like we still lack our courage for giving up material well-being.

>> Well, it seems like we still lack our courage for giving up material well-being.
 On the other hand, I think that If I went out of this real world and were freed , would I want to go back to this realistic world in a few years again? 

>> Correct    
Whatever I choose, the most important thing is not to be regretful for what I did. 

>> Correct
 I suddenly became philosophical.

>> Correct [Yeah, indeed!^^ kkk]
 Don\'t be influenced by me and see you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct


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