Composition

2016-06-24 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, Teacher! First of all, I was thankful that you showed me some pictures that you played drums. Even though it was not a video I somehow could see your active and lively performance. Hahaha! Just like you, I also want to master a musical instrument perfectly but it seems like it takes a lot of time and needs efforts. I should have learned it when I was young. That is okay! I won't give up playing my guitar. Just like what you said in our class, I hope I also can send you some pictures of my back playing the guitar when my skill reaches a specific level. Hahaha! Maybe, in the future, we can also dream of playing your drum and my guitar together in the same place. However, I think playing a eltric guitar would be more suitable with your drum. ^^;; I have one more homework. Hehehe! Anyway, take some rest so that you can get rid of your tiredness and see you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hey, [이름]!^^
Our time has always been wonderful

especially we talk about our dreams and

desires.

I hope that we can have more conversations

like this.

See you later!
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good afternoon, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 First of all, I was thankful that you showed me some pictures that you played drums. 

>> Correct
 Even though it was not a video I somehow could see your active and lively performance. Hahaha! 

>> Correct [I apologize if they were only photos. kkk]
 Just like you, I also want to master a musical instrument perfectly but it seems like it takes a lot of time and needs efforts.

>> Correct
 I should have learned it when I was young. 

>> Correct  
That is okay! 

>> Correct
 I won\'t give up playing my guitar. 

>> Correct
 Just like what you said in our class, I hope I also can send you some pictures of my back playing the guitar when my skill reaches a specific level. Hahaha! 

>> Correct
 Maybe, in the future, we can also dream of playing your drum and my guitar together in the same place.

>> Correct [I have thought about it, too!]
 However, I think playing a eltric guitar would be more suitable with your drum. ^^;; 

>> However, I think playing an electric guitar would be more suitable than your drums.  
I have one more homework. Hehehe! 

>> Correct
 Anyway, take some rest so that you can get rid of your tiredness and see you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct

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