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2016-06-29 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher with A blood type and Pisces! Even though you already got the two things, you don't need to feel down. It is just a kind of prejudice and it should not stereotype people's trait. When it comes to the blood type, nowadays, people in only a few countries tend to believe in it. The representative countries are Korea and Japan. As far as I know, it came from Europe but they don't discuss about the connection between one's personality and the blood type any more. Some scholars said that the reason why this baseless logic is spread in Asia is because they tend to focus on a group, not an individual. That's why people started to categorize groups according to the blood type. I think it seems like it came from homogeneity and people tend to get comfort in this specific group. Like how we already felt in our class, as soon as we knew that we have the same blood type, we felt gladness at once. Anyway, I think it is enough to enjoy it only for entertainment. ^^ Does your confidence go up again? Hehehe! See you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Honestly, I felt down when we discussed about it.

It seemed like I was doomed!kk

However, your explanation was convincing so here I am,

doesn\'t care anymore about what my blood type nor my zodiac sign

is. Thank you!~~
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher with A blood type and Pisces! 

>> Correct
 Even though you already got the two things, you don\'t need to feel down. 

>> Even though you already got two things, you don\'t need to feel down. 
 It is just a kind of prejudice and it should not stereotype people\'s trait.

>> Correct
 When it comes to the blood type, nowadays, people in only a few countries tend to believe in it.

>> Correct
The representative countries are Korea and Japan. 

>> Correct
 As far as I know, it came from Europe but they don\'t discuss about the connection between one\'s personality and the blood type any more.

>> Correct
 Some scholars said that the reason why this baseless logic is spread in Asia is because they tend to focus on a group, not an individual. 

>> Correct 
That\'s why people started to categorize groups according to the blood type. 

>> Correct 
 I think it seems like it came from homogeneity and people tend to get comfort in this specific group. 

>> Correct 
 Like how we already felt in our class, as soon as we knew that we have the same blood type, we felt gladness at once. 

>> Correct [Agree!]
 Anyway, I think it is enough to enjoy it only for entertainment. ^^

>> Correct 
 Does your confidence go up again? Hehehe!

>> Correct 
 See you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct 

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