Composition

2016-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! Here in Korea, it is raining heavily so our government even sent us an emergency message that please abstain from going out in this heavy rain. I am able to hear the rain falling indoors and the sound is really loud and clear. I hope this rain won't lead to any accidents. By the way, I'd like to explain more about 'Kangaroo Tribe' to you. People who depend on their parents either financially or emotionally are called 'Kangaroo Tribe' and here in Korea, it is a new trend. They are afraid of going out of their parents' care and they tend to lose confidence in making their lives on their own. This trend is considered as a big social problem but our government has not come up with a proper cure yet. If this situation lasted for a long time, we would be unable to expect for our bright future. We should have elected the President wisely. Suddenly, I brought up politics. See you tomorrow! ^^** P.S.: Thanks for saying that 'You deserve the new level.'

강사 첨삭

Thank you [이름] for sharing about the new trend.

In the Philippines, nowadays, young adults are becoming

more responsible in contrast to what you have now.

I hope that it will continue to help our society be more

independent.

See you again tomorrow!
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
 Here in Korea, it is raining heavily so our government even sent us an emergency message that please abstain from going out in this heavy rain. 

>> Here in Korea, it is raining heavily so our government even sent us an emergency message saying \"Please abstain from going out during this heavy rain.\"
 I am able to hear the rain falling indoors and the sound is really loud and clear. 

>> Correct [That scares me!] 
I hope this rain won\'t lead to any accidents. 

>> Correct 
By the way, I\'d like to explain more about \'Kangaroo Tribe\' to you. 

>> Correct 
People who depend on their parents either financially or emotionally are called \'Kangaroo Tribe\' and here in Korea, it is a new trend.

>> Correct
 They are afraid of going out of their parents\' care and they tend to lose confidence in making their lives on their own. 

>> Correct
 This trend is considered as a big social problem but our government has not come up with a proper cure yet. 

>> Correct 
If this situation lasted for a long time, we would be unable to expect for our bright future.

>> Correct
 We should have elected the President wisely.

>> Correct
 Suddenly, I brought up politics.

>> Correct
 See you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct
 P.S.: Thanks for saying that \'You deserve the new level.\'

>> Correct [You do!]

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