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2016-07-11 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! It was very hot yesterday but I only had to endure the heat with a small fan at home. If I had a notebook computer, I would go to a coffee shop and escape from the heat. By the way, as an extension of our class, I am going to explain more about the issue that I am encountering now. Originally, Chinese factory had to issue a Stock Letter to company A. However, I have issued a Stock Letter to company A depending on the remaining quantity in excel file on my own instead of our Chinese factory. I am sure that this stock quantity in excel file is correct one but the person in charge in Chinese factory has not admitted the excel file so he has refused to issue a Stock Letter. He said that even if the excel file is correct, our financial record doesn't match with this file so I am unable to issue a final Stock Letter to company A . I should have not issued this letter to company A without confirmation from our Chinese factory. I have worried about this issue but I am going to stop thinking of this matter. Since I am unable to put it back, it is useless if I continuously worry about it. Anyway, take care of yourself in order not to have a cold. See you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

[이름],

I think I got what you were saying a while ago.

It was a bit confusing for me, knowing the terminologies were a bit different.

However, this composition made it clearer for me.

It\'s sad to know that you have to deal with this alone.

Anyhow, I still think you also have to inform your boss if the need arises.

He may blame and get mad at you. But it will never open your possibilities

to negativities anymore.

Hope it works.

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 It was very hot yesterday but I only
 had to endure the heat with a small fan at home. 

>> Correct
 If I had a notebook computer, I would go to a coffee shop and escape from the heat. 

>> Correct
 By the way, as an extension of our class, I am going to explain more about the issue that I am encountering now. 

>> Correct 
Originally, Chinese factory had to issue a Stock Letter to company A.

>> Originally, the Chinese factory/branch had to issue a Stock Letter to company A.
 However, I have issued a Stock Letter to company A depending on the remaining quantity in excel file on my own instead of our Chinese factory. 

>>  However, I have issued a Stock Letter to company A depending on the remaining quantity in the excel file on my own instead of/on behalf of our Chinese factory. 
 I am sure that this stock quantity in excel file is correct one but the person in charge in Chinese factory has not admitted the excel file so he has refused to issue a Stock Letter. 

>>  I am sure that this stock quantity in excel file is the correct one but the person in charge in the Chinese factory has not admitted the excel file so he has refused to issue a Stock Letter. 
 He said that even if the excel file is correct, our financial record doesn\'t match with this file so I am unable to issue a final Stock Letter to company A . 

>> Correct  
In this case, I should have not issued this letter to company A without the confirmation from our Chinese factory.

>> Correct 

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