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2016-07-26 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good morning, Teacher! As an extension of our class, my doctor said that I only have to drink luck warm water and electrolyte beverage and should not eat any foods, even porridge for one day. After diarrhea stops, it is okay for me to start eating porridge and then I have to continue having this kind of meal for 2~3 days. I have been following this direction well but I feel uncomfortable in this hot weather. No matter how hot it is, I can't drink iced things. What I hate the most is that I can't drink coffee for a while so it makes me feel down. Whenever I get home, I feel extremely thirsty so I really want to drink a cup of iced water down in one gulp but it has become my dream for now. Fortunately, I'm getting better day by day so I guess I can totally recover from this disease after 2~3 days. Unintentionally, I lost 3 kilograms of weight but I don't want to suffer from it any longer, especially in this hot summer. Indeed, it was really painful. From yesterday, I have started having porridge and bananas so I have energy to do my daily life. No matter what, health is the most important thing. You should also take care of your health condition well in this super duper hot weather. See you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
How are you? I didn\'t hear anything from you

about it. I hope you will fully recover.

Regarding the food intake, I tend to disagree but I\'m not saying

that you should discontinue what you are doing.

Here in the Philippines, we encourage people to eat

despite their condition. We always think that we have

to replace the electrolytes that we pass out.

There are some exceptions when it comes to the food, of course.

I will tell you more tomorrow.

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
 As an extension of our class, my doctor said that I only have to drink luck warm water and electrolyte beverage and should not eat any foods, even porridge for one day. 

>> As an extension of our class, my doctor said that I only have to drink lukewarm water and electrolyte beverage and should not eat any foods, even porridge for one day. 
 After diarrhea stops, it is okay for me to start eating porridge and then I have to continue having this kind of meal for 2~3 days.

>> Correct
 I have been following this direction well but I feel uncomfortable in this hot weather. 

>> Correct
 No matter how hot it is, I can\'t drink iced things.

>> Correct
 What I hate the most is that I can\'t drink coffee for a while so it makes me feel down.

>> Correct
 Whenever I get home, I feel extremely thirsty so I really want to drink a cup of iced water down in one gulp but it has become my dream for now.

>> Correct
 Fortunately, I\'m getting better day by day so I guess I can totally recover from this disease after 2~3 days. 

>> Correct
 Unintentionally, I lost 3 kilograms of weight but I don\'t want to suffer from it any longer, especially in this hot summer. 

>> Correct
 Indeed, it was really painful.

>> Correct
 From yesterday, I have started having porridge and bananas so I have energy to do my daily life. 

>> Correct
 No matter what, health is the most important thing.

>> Correct
 You should also take care of your health condition well in this super duper hot weather. 

>> Correct
 See you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct

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