Composition

2016-07-27 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! These days, it is very hot here so the tropical night phenomenon has happened everyday. For your reference, when the nighttime temperature does not drop below 25 degrees Celsius, we call it 'Tropical Night Phenomenon'. In this case, the hot weather makes people feel uncomfortable and disturbs them in sleep. Here in Korea, suffering from this phenomenon for 5 days in the summer season is normal but this logic has already broken. It has lasted almost for 10 days so it makes me crazy. Moreover, cicadas' noise hinders me from having a deep sleep. It is okay for me to endure this hot weather but I can't stand this noise any longer. This noise is equivalent to the sound of a train and they are crying day and night. Cicadas are not considered as harmful insects so our government organization has not also come up with a good remedy. I hate that I am encountering this situation. I just hope that this summer will go faster. Anyway, I will stop here for today!^^**

강사 첨삭

I hate to read this composition, [이름].

It\'s because I feel the discomfort you are

encountering nowadays.

However, please stay strong and endure the situations

you are into right now.

I will see you tomorrow again.

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
 These days, it is very hot here so the tropical night phenomenon has happened everyday. 

>> Correct
 For your reference, when the nighttime temperature does not drop below 25 degrees Celsius, we call it \'Tropical Night Phenomenon\'.

>>  For your reference, when the temperature at night does not drop below 25 degrees Celsius, we call it \'Tropical Night Phenomenon\'.
 In this case, the hot weather makes people feel uncomfortable and disturbs them in sleep. 

>> Correct
 Here in Korea, suffering from this phenomenon for 5 days in the summer season is normal but this logic has already broken. 

>>  Here in Korea, suffering from this phenomenon for 5 days in the summer season is normal but this logic has already been broken. 
It has lasted almost for 10 days so it makes me crazy. 

>> Correct
 Moreover, cicadas\' noise hinders me from having a deep sleep. 

>> Correct
 It is okay for me to endure this hot weather but I can\'t stand this noise any longer. 

>> Correct
 This noise is equivalent to the sound of a train and they are crying day and night.

>> Correct
 Cicadas are not considered as harmful insects so our government organization has not also come up with a good remedy. 

>> Correct
 I hate that I am encountering this situation. 

>> Correct
 I just hope that this summer will go faster.

>> Correct
 Anyway, I will stop here for today!^^**

>> Correct

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