Composition

2016-07-28 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! Yesterday, I finally bought ear plugs and wore them when I went to sleep. It was very useful to prevent me to be exposed to cicadas' noise. However, I was bothered by mosquitoes' attack so I didn't have a tight sleep as well. I usually put my mosquito net in front of the bedroom door like curtains to block them from coming inside so I have no idea of how they were able to be inside yesterday. I killed 3 mosquitoes with my electric swatter as soon as I got up this morning and their stomachs were full of my blood. I did my blood donation to them unintentionally. ^^;; I hope that I will not be bothered by anything today! Anyway, please check my composition below. 1. To me, studying English is worth spending my own money. 2. To me, talking to my friends is always worth my time. 3. To me, traveling is worth giving up my sleep. 4. To me, money isn't worth losing my best friend. I will stop here for today and see you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
Your sentences are absolutely astonishing!

They are very intelligible. Anyhow, the content makes

me bothered. I hope that you can really

have a good night sleep tonight.

See you tomorrow!
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
 Yesterday, I finally bought ear plugs and wore them when I went to sleep.

>> Correct
 It was very useful to prevent me to be exposed to cicadas\' noise.

>> Correct
 However, I was bothered by mosquitoes\' attack so I didn\'t have a tight sleep as well. 

>> Correct
 I usually put my mosquito net in front of the bedroom door like curtains to block them from coming inside so I have no idea of how they were able to be inside yesterday.

>> Correct
 I killed 3 mosquitoes with my electric swatter as soon as I got up this morning and their stomachs were full of my blood. 

>> Correct [OMG!]
I did my blood donation to them unintentionally. ^^;; 

>> Correct
 I hope that I will not be bothered by anything today! 

>> Correct [I hope so.]
 Anyway, please check my composition below.

>> Correct
 1. To me, studying English is worth spending my own money.

>> Correct
 2. To me, talking to my friends is always worth my time.

>> Correct
 3. To me, traveling is worth giving up my sleep.

>> Correct
 4. To me, money isn\'t worth losing my best friend.

>> Correct
 I will stop here for today and see you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct

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