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2016-08-01 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! It was very hot last weekend so I went to a shopping mall to avoid the heat. It is not far away from my house so I rode a bicycle to get there. My boyfriend already reserved movie tickets online so we needed to get there before 8 am. We watched a movie entitled 'JASON BOURNE' and it was very interesting and exciting. During watching it, we totally lost track of time. These days, I am into Matt Damon so I really wanted to watch this Bourne series. After watching this movie, we went around the shopping mall to look for a new mobile phone with a reasonable price. We finally decided to buy 'Samsung Galaxy S7' with a low price and it was for my boyfriend. After doing this task, I went to the [이름]po airport to meet my friend. It has been a long time that we last met each other so I felt very pleased. Because of her tight schedule, we got together with each other only for 4 hours so I feel very regretful. That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]^^

Thank you for telling me about what happened to you last weekend.

I envy you because you were able to meet your friend.

In my case, my friend also came back to the Philippines

and I am dying to meet her.
I hope I can do that someday.

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 It was very hot last weekend so I went to a shopping mall to avoid the heat. 

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 It is not far away from my house so I rode a bicycle to get there.

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 My boyfriend already reserved movie tickets online so we needed to get there before 8 am. 

>> Correct
 We watched a movie entitled \'JASON BOURNE\' and it was very interesting and exciting. 

>> Correct
 During watching it, we totally lost track of time. 

>> Correct
 These days, I am into Matt Damon so I really wanted to watch this Bourne series. 

>> Correct
 After watching this movie, we went around the shopping mall to look for a new mobile phone with a reasonable price. 

>> Correct
 We finally decided to buy \'Samsung Galaxy S7\' with a low price and it was for my boyfriend. 

>> Correct
 After doing this task, I went to the [이름]po airport to meet my friend. 

>> Correct
 It has been a long time that we last met each other so I felt very pleased. 

>>  It has been a long time since we last met each other so I felt very pleased. 
 Because of her tight schedule, we got together with each other only for 4 hours so I feel very regretful. 

>> Because of her tight schedule, we spent four hours together so I felt very regretful.
 That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^

>> Correct

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