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2016-08-10 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! As an extension of our class, in our social mode, a lot of workers have a difficult situation in asking for a leave in their workplace. As a rule, if workers don't use fixed legal annual leave, an annual vacation allowance has to be paid by their company according to the number of days that they haven't used for this year. However, a lot of companies have not still follow this rule and even force workers to use their leave even if they are suffering from heavy tasks. In this situation, who can ask for a leave to the fullest? We are always faced with this contradictory situation. Moreover, some small companies can't enjoy this benefit and even they only can ask for an unpaid leave. According to a research, it is well known that Koreans work for the longest hours compared to other countries. I don't think that the productivity would be definitely good if we work hard for long hours. I am a little bit sad about the situation that we are experiencing now. Nobody wants to be a slave of work. That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^

강사 첨삭

[이름], I feel sorry for what I have read.
I know for a fact that your culture is really harsh when it comes to working.

However, remember that a person who has a job is one of the blessed people

in the world. They can earn to survive. We can earn to sustain our lives.

Compared to others who don\'t know where to get money from, we are still lucky.

Enjoy everything and look into the brighter side.

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
 As an extension of our class, in our social mode, a lot of workers have a difficult situation in asking for a leave in their workplace. 

>> Correct
 As a rule, if workers don\'t use fixed legal annual leave, an annual vacation allowance has to be paid by their company according to the number of days that they haven\'t used for this year. 

>> Correct
 However, a lot of companies have not still follow this rule and even force workers to use their leave even if they are suffering from heavy tasks. 

>> However, a lot of companies have not still followed this rule and even force workers to use their leave even if they are suffering from heavy tasks. 

 In this situation, who can ask for a leave to the fullest? 

>> Correct
 We are always faced with this contradictory situation. 

>> We always face this contradicting situation.
 Moreover, some small companies can\'t enjoy this benefit and even they only can ask for an unpaid leave.

>> Moreover, some small companies can\'t enjoy this benefit and even they can only ask for an unpaid leave.

According to a research, it is well known that Koreans work for the longest hours compared to other countries. 

>> Correct
 I don\'t think that the productivity would be definitely good if we work hard for long hours. 

>> Correct
 I am a little bit sad about the situation that we are experiencing now.

>> Correct
 Nobody wants to be a slave of work. 

>> Correct
 That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^

>> Correct

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