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2016-08-18 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! I am in the new office now so it is a little bit strange for me. I might need some time to adapt to this new environment. By the way, our factory called Golden Dragon is suffering from a tight budget so we can't make a deal with LG for the rest of this year. According to the news, Chinese government is trying to support and revive the Golden Dragon but it will take some time. The Golden Dragon has stood for the copper tube industry in China but industrial bad practice put the Golden Dragon in danger. We can't blame them because a lot of vendors can't help but accept unfair conditions in order to achieve 'Purchase Order'. A lot of customers are still requesting vendors to lower the unit price and at the same time, they want goods of high quality. Someone might see this situation badly but it is widespread abnormally. At this point, we can't help mentioning the unfair relationship between Superior and Subordinate. I will stop here for today and see you tomorrow! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
About your new office, I believe you will have time to adjust sooner or later.

And about the companies and businesses, I hate say this but the things you wrote

are correct and I think we cannot do anything about it.

We just need to protect ourselves and be cautious with whatever can happen

to our surroundings nowadays.

See you!~
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 I am in the new office now so it is a little bit strange for me. 

>> Correct
 I might need some time to adapt to this new environment. 

>> Correct
 By the way, our factory called Golden Dragon is suffering from a tight budget so we can\'t make a deal with LG for the rest of this year. 

>> Correct
 According to the news, Chinese government is trying to support and revive the Golden Dragon but it will take some time. 

>>  According to the news, the Chinese government is trying to support and revive the Golden Dragon but it will take some time. 
 The Golden Dragon has stood for the copper tube industry in China but industrial bad practice put the Golden Dragon in danger. 

 >> Correct
We can\'t blame them because a lot of vendors can\'t help but accept unfair conditions in order to achieve \'Purchase Order\'.

 >> Correct
 A lot of customers are still requesting vendors to lower the unit price and at the same time, they want goods of high quality. 

 >> A lot of customers are still requesting vendors to lower the unit price and at the same time, they want goods with high quality. 
 Someone might see this situation badly but it is widespread abnormally.

 >> Correct
 At this point, we can\'t help mentioning the unfair relationship between Superior and Subordinate. 

 >> Correct
 I will stop here for today and see you tomorrow! ^^

 >> Correct

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