Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
I totally forgot about the topic we were supposed to discuss.
I apologize. However, thank you for telling me so.
I will be discussing my opinions tomorrow.
But I just have a question to leave you: At what age did you start
buying tickets for lottery?
See you!
~~Teacher Erine~~
Good morning, Teacher!
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Do you remember that we were supposed to talk about advantages of a lottery?
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However, we suddenly talked about mistakes in workplace today.
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I am going to list advantages of a lottery below.
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1. We can enjoy a healthy leisure activity with a small amount of money.
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2. Buying a lottery is not harmful to other people in contrast to smoking.
>> Buying a lottery ticket is not harmful to other people in contrast to smoking.
3. We can enjoy this easily alone everywhere.
>> We can enjoy it everywhere alone.
4. We can at least have a hope until when the result comes out.
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5. Our government can do public works with profits from this lottery for the people.
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In conclusion, I am not saying that we should buy a lottery ticket aggressively.
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I just want to say that if you are available to buy this ticket and confident with not falling into this gambling, you can just enjoy this leisure activity with a light heart.
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But who knows, maybe one day you will win the lottery. Hahaha!
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See you tomorrow! ^^**
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