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2016-09-08 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! I'd like to explain to you about a lottery ticket here. 1. We can buy lottery tickets within the total amount of US$100 for every event. However, we always doubt about this limitation because no one can check the total quantity of ticket that people buy one by one. 2. Only a few people can have the right to sell the lottery ticket. *Single-parent family's householder *Disabled people *Public charge *Independence patriot 3. The stores that produced the first prize are usually popular to people who want to buy the ticket. People intentionally go those stores to have lucky energies from them. 4. We have two types of methods of buying ticket. The first one is automatic. A machine helps people choose numbers automatically. The other one is that we choose numbers and mark them on a card ourselves. 5. The result is broadcasted live on TV on Friday nights. There is a rumor that drawing the numbers has a trick but I don't care because I only see it as an entertainment. Anyway, I will stop here for today and see you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

It is really interesting for both of us to continuously talk about this topic.

Maybe, I can tell you other things related to this topic

tomorrow.
We had another time well-spend today.

See you again!
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

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 I\'d like to explain to you about a lottery ticket here. 

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 1. We can buy lottery tickets within the total amount of US$100 for every event.

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 However, we always doubt about this limitation because no one can check the total quantity of ticket that people buy one by one. 

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 2. Only a few people can have the right to sell the lottery ticket. 

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 *Single-parent family\'s householder
 *Disabled people
*Public charge
*Independence patriot

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 3. The stores that produced the first prize are usually popular to people who want to buy the ticket. 

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 People intentionally go those stores to have lucky energies from them. 

>> People intentionally go to those stores to have lucky energies from them. 
 4. We have two types of methods of buying ticket. 

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 The first one is automatic. 

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 A machine helps people choose numbers automatically. 

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 The other one is that we choose numbers and mark them on a card ourselves. 

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 5. The result is broadcasted live on TV on Friday nights. 

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 There is a rumor that drawing the numbers has a trick but I don\'t care because I only see it as an entertainment. 

>> Correct
 Anyway, I will stop here for today and see you tomorrow! ^^**

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