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2016-09-26 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good morning, Teacher! I am happy to see you having a better condition in comparison to last week. I think time is medicine for colds so you just have to endure it for 2~3 days. ^^ By the way, I found the name of disease and it is called Guillain-Barre syndrome. Have you heard about this disease when you used to be a nurse? From what I searched, it is a nervous system disease and the cause of this disease has not been found yet. It is my first time to hear that so I felt very disconcerted. Even if I don't have good memories with him, I remembered that he was a nice guy so I felt very sorrowful. He passed away at the age of 70 so I felt more sorry for his death. I am going to think that he went to a better world and he is doing fine with his daughter who passed away 2 years ago. I suddenly feel the futility of life. That is all for today and see you tomorrow! P.S.: I already registered my class again and I will meet you on October 5th after finishing our current class.

강사 첨삭

[이름],

I\'m sorry to hear about the situation of your uncle. As the saying goes, \"All the good ones

leave early and the bad ones stay.\"

I belong to the latter part.

But, kidding aside, come to think of it. There are younger people who suffer from this

disease and die early. Your uncle suffered from it but maybe experienced the symptoms

not long compared to the others.

I\'ll tell you more next time.

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
 I am happy to see you having a better condition in comparison to last week. 

>> Correct
 I think time is medicine for colds so you just have to endure it for 2~3 days. ^^

>>  I think time is the medicine for colds so you just have to endure it for 2~3 days. ^^
 By the way, I found the name of disease and it is called Guillain-Barre syndrome.

>> Correct
 Have you heard about this disease when you used to be a nurse? 

>> Correct [Yes. It\'s very rare.]
 From what I searched, it is a nervous system disease and the cause of this disease has not been found yet. 

>> Correct 
It is my first time to hear that so I felt very disconcerted.

>> Correct 
 Even if I don\'t have good memories with him, I remembered that he was a nice guy so I felt very sorrowful. 

>> Correct 
 He passed away at the age of 70 so I felt more sorry for his death. 

>> Correct 
 I am going to think that he went to a better world and he is doing fine with his daughter who passed away 2 years ago. 

>> Correct 
 I suddenly feel the futility of life. 

>> Correct 
 That is all for today and see you tomorrow!

>> Correct 
 P.S.: I already registered my class again and I will meet you on October 5th after finishing our current class.

>> Correct 

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