Composition

2016-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, Teacher! Regarding the wedding culture there, I was somehow supersized at the information heard from you. I didn't know that you need one year of preparation for a wedding. Here in Korea, we also need some time to prepare for the wedding but in my case, I am going to minimize all processes. Most of couples prefer to arrange all processes with a wedding planner so wedding package agencies are widespread here. When it comes to the cost, of course, the wedding with a wedding planner would be very expensive but you don't need to put effort to find all suitable things such as a weeding hall, dress, makeup, studio and so on. You can just move and act according to the guidance of a wedding planner if you are willing to pay the expensive cost. However, in my case, I am not a person who puts importance on my wedding and I want a substantial wedding without window dressing. Even if I am having this kind of simply thinking, there are still a lot of things to consider. For example, I need to prepare a wedding bouquet for myself and corsages for my soon to be husband, parents and a master of ceremony at a wedding. If I bought those thru wedding agencies, I would have to pay great expense. I am going to make those with my older sister the day before my wedding day. I think it would not only give a good memory to me, but also save the expense. Tiredness would be given. Hehehe! Let’s talk more about this tomorrow! ^^;; See you soon!

강사 첨삭

[이름], this is such a great idea!^^
Getting married is also being practical.

And with your attitude, I think you will really save a lot from

the effort you are willing to give.

If there are things I can help you with, just ask, OK?

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good afternoon, Teacher! 

>> Correct
 Regarding the wedding culture there, I was somehow supersized at the information heard from you.

>>  Regarding the wedding culture there, I was somehow surprised at the information I heard from you.

I didn\'t know that you need one year of preparation for a wedding. 

>> Correct
 Here in Korea, we also need some time to prepare for the wedding but in my case, I am going to minimize all processes. 

>> Correct
 Most of couples prefer to arrange all processes with a wedding planner so wedding package agencies are widespread here. 

>>  Most couples prefer to arrange all processes with a wedding planner so wedding package agencies are widespread here. 
 When it comes to the cost, of course, the wedding with a wedding planner would be very expensive but you don\'t need to put effort to find all suitable things such as a weeding hall, dress, makeup, studio and so on. 

>>  When it comes to the cost, of course, the wedding with a wedding planner would be very expensive but you don\'t need to put effort to find all suitable things such as a wedding hall, dress, makeup, studio and so on. 
 You can just move and act according to the guidance of a wedding planner if you are willing to pay the expensive cost.

>> Correct
 However, in my case, I am not a person who puts importance on my wedding and I want a substantial wedding without window dressing. 

>> Correct
 Even if I am having this kind of simply thinking, there are still a lot of things to consider.

>>  Even if I am having this kind of simple way of thinking, there are still a lot of things to consider.
 For example, I need to prepare a wedding bouquet for myself and corsages for my soon to be husband, parents and a master of ceremony at a wedding.

>> Correct
 If I bought those thru wedding agencies, I would have to pay great expense. 

>> Correct
 I am going to make those with my older sister the day before my wedding day. 

>> Correct [If only I was there, I would volunteer t help you.]
 I think it would not only give a good memory to me, but also save the expense. 

>> Correct
 Tiredness would be given. Hehehe! 

>> Correct
 Let’s talk more about this tomorrow! ^^;;

>> Correct
 See you soon!

>> Correct

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