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2016-10-09 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, Teacher! Regarding our lunar and solar calendar, I am going to clarify them more for you. As an example of mine, I was really born on November 2 and the lunar date at that time was on October 6. For your reference, our calendar marks the lunar date with small numbers under big numbers so it is easy for us to notice these two dates. Old generation including my parent and grandparent preferred to use the lunar calendar so my birthday was registered as October 6 on my ID without my agreement. Hahaha! As this rule, my real birthday is based on the small number so I need to check when my birthday is every year. This year, the date of October 6 is matched with the date of November 5 and it is my real birthday. Because of this complexity, only a few friends count and remember my real birthday if I don't say the exact day myself. It seems like very complicated but there is a profound meaning on that. I am not confident to explain it in detail but I think at least I can help you understand the system of the lunar and solar calendar thru this composition. That is all for today. ^^ Have a nice weekend! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
Our weekend is almost over but I still got the chance to

see and read your composition before we meet tomorrow.

Thank you for explaining this to me further.

It\'s just too complicated for me to know. Kkkk

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good afternoon, Teacher!
>> Correct
Regarding our lunar and solar calendar, I am going to clarify them more for you. 

>> Correct
 As an example of mine, I was really born on November 2 and the lunar date at that time was on October 6. 

>> Correct
 For your reference, our calendar marks the lunar date with small numbers under big numbers so it is easy for us to notice these two dates. 

>> Correct 
Old generation including my parent and grandparent preferred to use the lunar calendar so my birthday was registered as October 6 on my ID without my agreement. Hahaha! 

>> Correct  
As this rule, my real birthday is based on the small number so I need to check when my birthday is every year. 

>> Correct
 This year, the date of October 6 is matched with the date of November 5 and it is my real birthday. 

>> Correct
 Because of this complexity, only a few friends count and remember my real birthday if I don\'t say the exact day myself. 

>> Correct
 It seems like very complicated but there is a profound meaning on that. 

>> It seems very complicated but there is a profound meaning on that.
 I am not confident to explain it in detail but I think at least I can help you understand the system of the lunar and solar calendar thru this composition. 

>> Correct
 That is all for today. ^^

>> Correct
 Have a nice weekend! ^^**

>> Correct

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