Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
Here is one thing that I want you to consider
despite the expenses you will have for your wedding.
You have been with your boyfriend for quite a long time now. But getting
married is another chapter in your relationship.
Getting married with the right guy, the perfect guy, deserves a perfect
ceremony so I know you already got what I meant!^^
~~Teacher Erine~~
Good afternoon, Teacher!
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Today, we talked about a wedding and I found that you have a different idea with me.
>> Today, we talked about weddings and I found that you have a different idea with me.
Maybe, the way of thinking that you have is common and natural.
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Here in Korea, most brides would also hope that their wedding ceremony will be wonderful and perfect.
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I can understand this idea because a wedding is known as once in a lifetime event.
>> I can understand this idea because weddings are known as once in a lifetime event.
The problem there is that there were some instances that couples were easily deceived or got rip off because of the perception.
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The reason is because it is their first time to hold a wedding so they have no idea of the wedding process and they have a way of thinking that they don’t want to spoil their wedding just because of the cost.
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That is why the wedding companies tend to take advantage of newlyweds’ psychology and then, the wedding industry is getting bigger and bigger with bubbles.
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I feel very regretful when I see the meaning of wedding is tarnished.
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Fortunately, a lot of people have started to minimize and simplify the cost and the ceremony of their wedding.
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It indicates that they are already conscious that a current wedding ceremony is rich in empty formalities.
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In my case, I also don’t want to waste expenses so I am going to omit some processes.
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I don’t think the way of my thinking would spoil the mood and hinder myself from enjoying my wedding.
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The most important thing is just two of us, me and my soon to be husband, isn’t it?
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That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^
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