Composition

Hello, [이름]!
I have already heard about the customs that you have 

when it comes to parties. However, I still want to thank you for sharing them

to me through you composition.

We can also discuss these things during our class.

See you then!^^
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good afternoon, Teacher!
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 I felt that Filipinos really put importance on family ties again.

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 I think your some parties there really seem to come from strong family bonds and community friendships. 

>> I think some of your parties there really seem to come from strong family bonds and community friendships.
 Here in Korea, we only have a few parties or ceremonies and I am going to list below.

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 First, we usually have a party when we hold a wedding ceremony. 

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 However, these days, many people have started to minimize this ceremony and the format is being changed to a small wedding.

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 The reason why this trend is happening is because our economic situation is poor so they can\'t afford to hold their wedding royally.

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 No matter what the reason is, I agree with this trend and I think the flow seems to be going to a right way. 

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Second, we have a party when our child turns one year old. 

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 In this party, we usually invite people like families, relatives, co-workers and so on. 

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 However, this party is also being considered as a useless formality if the party is grandiose. 

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In accordance with this atmosphere, there are some people who skip this party because they don\'t want to give burdens to others. 

>> In accordance with this atmosphere, there are some people who skip this party because they don\'t want to give burden to others. 
 Of course, the burden indicates money as a gift. 

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 In this case, since parents have to celebrate their child, they have a small party in their own house simply. 

>> In this case, since parents have to celebrate their child, they have a small and simple party in their own house. 
 Finally, we celebrate our parents\' birthday specially when they turn 60 years old.

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 Our current generation tends to be practical so some people replace this party with sending their parents on a trip. 

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 The origin of the second and third party came from old customs.

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 In the old days, lifespan was too short and babies used to die right after birth because of the poor medical level. 

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That is why the alive existence itself was too precise in the past. 

>> That is why the existence itself was too precise in the past.  
However, now, we are entering \'the time of 100 years old\' so maybe, some parties from the old customs would vanish soon. 

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 Of course, parties without any burdens are okay for everyone anytime. 

>>  Of course, parties without any burden are okay for everyone anytime. 
 That is all for today and see you on Monday! ^^

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