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2016-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good morning, Teacher! We suddenly talked about stocks. Maybe, this subject would be strange for you because you have never experienced that one. However, I am sure that it won't help you unless you are very capable with that. Even if someone is very skillful but the person is individual, there is only a tiny possibility to earn money. It means that you won't win over speculators who invest a huge amount of money. However, there are still a lot of individuals who invest in stocks and they continue investing even if they failed and lost their money. Maybe, they want to recoup the loss that they suffered and this mentality seems to make them do that again and again. I think investment in stocks is also a kind of addiction and gambling. I have never seen people making a profit on it and I have seen a lot of instances that people were miserable with losing money. No matter what, making a deposit is the best way to make money grow more. That is all for today and see you! ^^**

강사 첨삭

[이름],
While I was reading your composition, I just felt

that I had taken a lecture in Investment 101!^^
Thank you though for telling me about these things.

I am interested in it but I don\'t promise that I can easily understand these things.

See you tomorrow~

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
 We suddenly talked about stocks.

>> Correct
 Maybe, this subject would be strange for you because you have never experienced that one. 

>> Correct
 However, I am sure that it won\'t help you unless you are very capable with that. 

>> Correct
 Even if someone is very skillful but the person is individual, there is only a tiny possibility to earn money. 

>>  Even if there is a skillful individual, there is only a tiny possibility to earn money. 
It means that you won\'t win over speculators who invest a huge amount of money. 

>> Correct
 However, there are still a lot of individuals who invest in stocks and they continue investing even if they failed and lost their money. 

>> Correct  
Maybe, they want to recoup the loss that they suffered and this mentality seems to make them do that again and again. 

>> Correct
 I think investment in stocks is also a kind of addiction and gambling. 

>> Correct
 I have never seen people making a profit on it and I have seen a lot of instances that people were miserable with losing money. 

>>  I have never seen people making a profit on it and I have seen a lot of instances that people were miserable because of losing money. 
 No matter what, making a deposit is the best way to make money grow more. 

>> Correct
 That is all for today and see you! ^^**

>> Correct

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