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2011-06-29 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Dear [Name]. [Name], Good morning! Would you please also give me a task in the QM notification about "Heater Core" ? And please give ma a documentation that it is agreed with the supplier as well as the calculation. The calculation should be based on the guideline stored under Q:\09 Local BMS\Finance & Controlling\Regulation I use to use Ms.Cha's ID to upload data in Bellin and I don't have any ID of Bellin untill now. Would you please create new ID of Bellin for me? Thank you for your help.

강사 첨삭

 

Hello there my dear,

     Thank you for this composition. I hope I was able to help you today. Have a great day ahead!

Take care ~

 

 Dear [Name]. [Name],

>> correct
Good morning!

>> correct
Would you please also give me a task in the QM notification about "Heater Core" ?

>>Would you please also give me a task in the QM notification about "Heater Core" .
And please give ma a documentation that it is agreed with the supplier as well as the calculation.

>>And please give me a documentation that was agreed with the supplier as well as the calculation.

>>And please give me a documentation as well as the calculation that was agreed with the supplier.
The calculation should be based on the guideline stored under Q:9 Local BMSFinance & ControllingRegulation

>>The calculation should be based on the guideline stored under Q:9 Local BMSFinance & ControllingRegulation.
I use to use Ms.Cha's ID to upload data in Bellin and I don't have any ID of Bellin untill now.

>>I use to use Ms.Cha's ID to upload data in Bellin ,and until now I don't have any ID in Bellin .
I don't have any ID in Bellin.

>>Correct but you may omit this sentence as it was already explained at the sentence above.
Would you please create new ID of Bellin for me?

>> correct
Thank you for your help.

>> correct

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