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2016-10-23 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, Teacher! I am happy to see you alive. ^^ I think it is the best way for you to not go out when you experience a heavy typhoon like yesterday. Your safety is the most important asset, so if this situation happens again, you don't need to hesitate to stay at home. Of course, I don't want you to experience this kind of big typhoon again. ^^;; By the way, yesterday, I tried my wedding dress on again and I finally chose a bell style dress. I am planning to have an event in my wedding so I would feel very uncomfortable if I wear a mermaid style dress. Moreover, I am not confident to lose much weight so I gave up the mermaid style dress. Hahaha! Everything goes smoothly but the problem there is that I haven't had my ears pierced. I somehow feel afraid about the piercing. ^^;; That is all for today and have a wonderful weekend! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
It\'s a good thing to see that you

have already decided to choose the wedding dress!^^

I want to see you, [이름]!!! TT.TT

Thank you for sharing this important information and the concern you showed

during our crisis here.

See you tomorrow.

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good afternoon, Teacher!

>> Correct
 I am happy to see you alive. ^^

>> Correct
 I think it is the best way for you to not go out when you experience a heavy typhoon like yesterday. 

>>  I think it is the best way for you not to go out when you experience a heavy typhoon like yesterday. 
 Your safety is the most important asset, so if this situation happens again, you don\'t need to hesitate to stay at home. 

>> Correct
 Of course, I don\'t want you to experience this kind of big typhoon again. ^^;;

>> Correct
 By the way, yesterday, I tried my wedding dress on again and I finally chose a bell style dress. 

 >> Correct
I am planning to have an event in my wedding so I would feel very uncomfortable if I wear a mermaid style dress. 

>> Correct
 Moreover, I am not confident to lose much weight so I gave up the mermaid style dress. Hahaha!

>> Correct
 Everything goes smoothly but the problem there is that I haven\'t had my ears pierced. 

>> Correct
 I somehow feel afraid about the piercing. ^^;;

>> Correct
 That is all for today and have a wonderful weekend! ^^

>> Correct

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