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2016-10-27 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good morning, Teacher! As an extension of our class, I have never borrowed money from my friends. I can say that I haven't suffered from a tight budget but it doesn't mean that I am rich. As far as I remembered, my pocket money was enough to spend and in other words, I didn't need a lot of money when I was in school days. After graduating, I have been working until now so this situation has been resolving my monetary problem. I can say that I am lucky to have my life without worries about money. When it comes to lending money, I have two experiences and it only indicates situations with a little bit big amount of more than USD 1000 money. In my case, I only lend money to some friends who are very close to me. I trust that they will give it back to me and on the other hands, it is okay for me not to get it back from them. It means that I don't lend money unless I have a thought that it is okay if I could not get it back. Just like what you said, my thought is based on a mind like a donation. My precious friends are that money can’t buy so it is okay for me to lose some amount of money only for my friends. Of course, lending too much money is hard and I have a negative idea about it. Let me imagine that I lent a huge amount of money to my friend and I haven’t gotten it back! If this situation really happened, I am sure that I would lose not only my friend but also my money. Maybe, real friends won’t give this kind of big burdens to their loved ones. Well, this monetary issue is somehow very sensitive. That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

I would agree that this issue is

somewhat sensitive, [이름]!^^
However, you still managed to talk about it

in a non-offensive way. Thank you for

sharing your experiences to me!^^
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

>> Correct
As an extension of our class, I have never borrowed money from my friends.

>> Correct
I can say that I haven\'t suffered from a tight budget but it doesn\'t mean that I am rich.

>> Correct
As far as I remembered, my pocket money was enough to spend and in other words, I didn\'t need a lot of money when I was in school days.

>> Correct
After graduating, I have been working until now so this situation has been resolving my monetary problem.

>> Correct
I can say that I am lucky to have my life without worries about money.

>> Correct
When it comes to lending money, I have two experiences and it only indicates situations with a little bit big amount of more than USD 1000 money.

>> Correct
In my case, I only lend money to some friends who are very close to me.

>> Correct
I trust that they will give it back to me and on the other hands, it is okay for me not to get it back from them.

>> I trust that they will give it back to me and on the other hand, it is okay for me not to get it back from them.
It means that I don\'t lend money unless I have a thought that it is okay if I could not get it back.

>> Correct
Just like what you said, my thought is based on a mind like a donation.

>> Just like what you said, my thought can be comparable to the idea of donating.
My precious friends are that money can’t buy so it is okay for me to lose some amount of money only for my friends.

>> Correct
Of course, lending too much money is hard and I have a negative idea about it.

>> Correct
Let me imagine that I lent a huge amount of money to my friend and I haven’t gotten it back!

>> Correct
If this situation really happened, I am sure that I would lose not only my friend but also my money.

>> Correct
Maybe, real friends won’t give this kind of big burdens to their loved ones.

>> Correct
Well, this monetary issue is somehow very sensitive.

>> Correct
That is all for today and see you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct

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