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2016-10-28 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Good morning, Teacher! Today, we talked about moving. I am going to explain about our housing types in Korea first. Many people prefer to have an apartment than villas and multiplex houses. Maybe, it would be not easy for you to understand about our house types easily. When it comes to apartments, it is the most popular housing type for everyone so the price has become naturally higher and higher. Because of this popularity, it is a dream for young generation to have an apartment when they settle down. In order to have it, most people have to get a loan and they need to repay it for a long time due to its high price. In this situation with no resident stability, a lot of people are suffering from looking for a suitable house. People who don’t have their own house usually move to a new house once every two years because many landlords tend to raise their rent. In this situation, if we can't afford to accept the higher price, we can't help but move to smaller or worse one. This situation indicates that no matter how hard we save our money, buying a house is a kind of long journey in our lives. Moreover, nowadays, the real estate market is like gambling so it is very difficult for us to judge if the price of house is reasonable. I am also one of the people who don’t participate in buying a house because of the crazy house prices. I don’t know how long I have to wait for our house price to become stable and reasonable but someday, I really want to be an owner of a spacious house. That is all for today and see you on Monday! ^^**

강사 첨삭

It may be difficult for me to

understand your housing system is in Korea, [이름].

However, I have heard some stories about it

and from your explanation, I had a better understanding

about it. Thank you.^^

See you again on Monday!
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher!

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 Today, we talked about moving. 

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 I am going to explain about our housing types in Korea first.

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 Many people prefer to have an apartment than villas and multiplex houses.

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 Maybe, it would be not easy for you to understand about our house types easily. 

>>  Maybe, it would not be easy for you to understand about our house types easily. 
 When it comes to apartments, it is the most popular housing type for everyone so the price has become naturally higher and higher. 

>> Correct  
Because of this popularity, it is a dream for young generation to have an apartment when they settle down.

>> Correct
 In order to have it, most people have to get a loan and they need to repay it for a long time due to its high price. 

>> Correct
 In this situation with no resident stability, a lot of people are suffering from looking for a suitable house. 

>> Correct
 People who don’t have their own house usually move to a new house once every two years because many landlords tend to raise their rent.

>> Correct
 In this situation, if we can\'t afford to accept the higher price, we can\'t help but move to smaller or worse one. 

>> Correct
 This situation indicates that no matter how hard we save our money, buying a house is a kind of long journey in our lives. 

>> Correct
 Moreover, nowadays, the real estate market is like gambling so it is very difficult for us to judge if the price of house is reasonable. 

>> Correct
 I am also one of the people who don’t participate in buying a house because of the crazy house prices. 

>> Correct
 I don’t know how long I have to wait for our house price to become stable and reasonable but someday, I really want to be an owner of a spacious house. 

>> Correct
 That is all for today and see you on Monday! ^^**

>> Correct

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