Composition

2016-11-02 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon Teacher! I got a message from Power English and they informed me that there is a vote that we are going to select the best costume. I am going to vote one of them objectively. ^^ By the way, today, we talked about the night sky. Unfortunately, I am only able to see satellites in the sky here in Seoul and I have no chance to see bright stars. I sometimes can watch various skies in other countries on TV and there were a lot of bright and glittering stars as well shooting stars. I have never seen those kinds of magnificent spectacles so I really hope that I would be able to see them closely in person. I envy you who has unpolluted air. ^^;; That is all for today and see you tomorrow! *^^*

강사 첨삭

Good evening, [이름]!
I\'m checking your composition here from my pad.

Regarding the pollution thing, Baguio City

is the most polluted cities in the Philippines, [이름].

Don\'t be surprised.

I\'ll explain this further to you tomorrow.

~~Teacher Erine~~

Good afternoon Teacher! 

>> Correct
 I got a message from Power English and they informed me that there is a vote that we are going to select the best costume. 

>> I got a message from Power English and they informed me to vote for the best costume.
 I am going to vote one of them objectively. ^^

>> Correct [You should!^^]
 By the way, today, we talked about the night sky. 

>> Correct
 Unfortunately, I am only able to see satellites in the sky here in Seoul and I have no chance to see bright stars. 

>> Correct [Really? Satellites?]
 I sometimes can watch various skies in other countries on TV and there were a lot of bright and glittering stars as well shooting stars.

>> Correct
 I have never seen those kinds of magnificent spectacles so I really hope that I would be able to see them closely in person. 

>> Correct
 I envy you who has unpolluted air. ^^;;

>> Correct
 That is all for today and see you tomorrow! *^^*

>> Correct

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