Composition

2016-11-21 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! When it comes to cooking, I have done it since I started living alone in Seoul and it has almost been for 11 years. I used to cook when I was in Pusan but my role was just a helper. I can say that I am fond of cooking and I do it every day. However, after moving into this house, I am losing a chance to cook because a public market is a little bit far so it is accessible by a bicycle. When I lived in the previous house, I could buy some ingredients in a public market whenever I need. Of course, there is a supermarket near my house but I don't like going there because of the high price and stale ingredients in comparison to things in a public market. If I move to a new house after a few years, I want to look for a house near a public market. Hehehe! That is all for toady and see you tomorrow! ^^**

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름].

I understand your concern with regards to your idea.

You are thinking more of the convenience, right?

Thanks for sharing anyway!
See you tomorrow!
~~Teacher Erine~~

Good morning, Teacher! 

>> Correct.
 When it comes to cooking, I have done it since I started living alone in Seoul and it has almost been for 11 years. 

>> Correct.
 I used to cook when I was in Pusan but my role was just a helper. 

>> Correct.
 I can say that I am fond of cooking and I do it every day. 

>> Correct.
 However, after moving into this house, I am losing a chance to cook because a public market is a little bit far so it is accessible by a bicycle. 

>>  However, after moving into this house, I have been losing a chance to cook because a public market is a little bit far and is only accessible by a bicycle.
 When I lived in the previous house, I could buy some ingredients in a public market whenever I need. 

>> Correct.
 Of course, there is a supermarket near my house but I don\'t like going there because of the high price and stale ingredients in comparison to things in a public market. 

>> Correct.
 If I move to a new house after a few years, I want to look for a house near a public market. Hehehe!

>> Correct.
 That is all for toady and see you tomorrow! ^^**

>> Correct.

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