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2017-01-06 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Happy New Year, teacher!!! It's been a really long time. How have you been? I've been good. As I told you before, my parents are visiting here in Malaysia. Timely, my son is having a winter vacation now. So, we could go on a trip all together. We went to the Langkawi Island last week in order to have a merry Christmas holidays and happy new year. Langkawi Island is well known for Malaysians' favorite vacation spot. I've been there 18 years ago with my monther and my past grand mother. As time passed by, the island changed a lot. There are several busy commercial streets, whereas it was really queit 18 years ago. I was satisfied with this change since I could enjoy shopping and eating there without any inconveince. Moreover, I could visit some new tourist attractions that I've never been to before. The Sky Cab is one of them. It is a cable car heading to the top mountain of the Langkwai Island. I had great time riding the Sky Cab there even though I felt sorry about the high price.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Kaylee!

It\'s so lovely to hear from you again!!!

I missed you so much!

Thanks for updating me about your life in Malaysia.

I\'m glad you had a blast with your parents and your son during the holidays.

Enjoy your day! Take care!

Ciao!

~Teacher Marie~

Happy New Year, teacher!!!

>> CORRECT!
 It\'s been a really long time.

>> CORRECT!
 How have you been?

>> CORRECT!
 I\'ve been good.

>> CORRECT!
 As I told you before, my parents are visiting here in Malaysia.

>> CORRECT!
 Timely, my son is having a winter vacation now.

>> It\'s perfect timing too since my son is having his winter vacation now.
 So, we could go on a trip all together.

>> That\'s why we could all go on a trip together.
 We went to the Langkawi Island last week in order to have a merry Christmas holidays and happy new year.

>> We went to Langkawi Island last week to celebrate Christmas and New Year\'s Day.
 Langkawi Island is well known for Malaysians\' favorite vacation spot.

>> Langkawi Island is a well-known vacation spot for Malaysians.
 I\'ve been there 18 years ago with my monther and my past grand mother.

>> I went there 18 years ago with my mother and my late grandmother.
 As time passed by, the island changed a lot.

>> Now that a lot of time has passed, the island changed a lot.
 There are several busy commercial streets, whereas it was really queit 18 years ago.

>> Whereas it was really quiet and empty 18 years ago, there were several busy, commercial streets now.
 I was satisfied with this change since I could enjoy shopping and eating there without any inconveince.

>> CORRECT!

*inconvenience
 Moreover, I could visit some new tourist attractions that I\'ve never been to before.

>> CORRECT!
 The Sky Cab is one of them.

>> CORRECT!
 It is a cable car heading to the top mountain of the Langkwai Island.

>> It is a cable car heading to the top of the mountain in Langkawi Island.
 I had great time riding the Sky Cab there even though I felt sorry about the high price.

>> I had a great time riding the Sky Cab there, although I felt bad about the high price.


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