Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello there, Kaylee!
It\'s so lovely to hear from you again!!!
I missed you so much!
Thanks for updating me about your life in Malaysia.
I\'m glad you had a blast with your parents and your son during the holidays.
Enjoy your day! Take care!
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~
Happy New Year, teacher!!!
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It\'s been a really long time.
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How have you been?
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I\'ve been good.
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As I told you before, my parents are visiting here in Malaysia.
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Timely, my son is having a winter vacation now.
>> It\'s perfect timing too since my son is having his winter vacation now.
So, we could go on a trip all together.
>> That\'s why we could all go on a trip together.
We went to the Langkawi Island last week in order to have a merry Christmas holidays and happy new year.
>> We went to Langkawi Island last week to celebrate Christmas and New Year\'s Day.
Langkawi Island is well known for Malaysians\' favorite vacation spot.
>> Langkawi Island is a well-known vacation spot for Malaysians.
I\'ve been there 18 years ago with my monther and my past grand mother.
>> I went there 18 years ago with my mother and my late grandmother.
As time passed by, the island changed a lot.
>> Now that a lot of time has passed, the island changed a lot.
There are several busy commercial streets, whereas it was really queit 18 years ago.
>> Whereas it was really quiet and empty 18 years ago, there were several busy, commercial streets now.
I was satisfied with this change since I could enjoy shopping and eating there without any inconveince.
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*inconvenience
Moreover, I could visit some new tourist attractions that I\'ve never been to before.
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The Sky Cab is one of them.
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It is a cable car heading to the top mountain of the Langkwai Island.
>> It is a cable car heading to the top of the mountain in Langkawi Island.
I had great time riding the Sky Cab there even though I felt sorry about the high price.
>> I had a great time riding the Sky Cab there, although I felt bad about the high price.
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