Composition

2017-02-21 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon,teacher! It is too cold this morning. I feel sick and tired of the cold weather. It has lasted too long. ^^;; I hope I can greet the warm weather very soon. By the way, yesterday, we only talked about a good side of my personality. Today, let's talk about a good side of yours. Finally, I am going to express my opinion about a topic below. *How can you reduce stress? I usually eat more and go to a shop called 'Dayiso' to buy things when I get stressed. When it comes to eating, I eat a expensive dish that I don't think it is worth to pay. If I didn't still get rid of my stress, I go to 'Dayiso' and buy things that are not that necessary. Fortunately, the prices there are all cheap so it doesn't affect my budget. ^^;; For your reference, 'Dayiso' is a kind of 'Unitop' there. That is all for today and see you later! ^^**

강사 첨삭



Hi, [이름]!


Thank you for sharing about how you reduce your stress.

I guess, that is usual for women who are stressed.

Well, in my case, I just eat and sleep.

So the tendency is for me to get chubbier or fatter. ^^

I want to change this habit when I\'m stressed because it will give me more stress if I gained weight. hehe

See you later!


_Teacher Dianne ^^


Good afternoon, teacher!

>> Correct
 It is too cold this morning.

>> Correct
 I feel sick and tired of the cold weather. 

>> Correct
 It has lasted too long. ^^;; 

>> Correct
 I hope I can greet the warm weather very soon. 

>> Correct
 By the way, yesterday, we only talked about a good side of my personality. 

>> Correct

>> Or: By the way, yesterday, we only talked about the good side of my personality. 
Today, let\'s talk about a good side of yours. 

>> Correct
 Finally, I am going to express my opinion about a topic below.

>> Correct
 *How can you reduce stress?

>> Correct
 I usually eat more and go to a shop called \'Dayiso\' to buy things when I get stressed.

>> Correct
 When it comes to eating, I eat a expensive dish that I don\'t think it is worth to pay.

>>  When it comes to eating, I eat an expensive dish that I don\'t think it is worth to pay.
 If I didn\'t still get rid of my stress, I go to \'Dayiso\' and buy things that are not that necessary. 

>> Correct
 Fortunately, the prices there are all cheap so it doesn\'t affect my budget. ^^;;

>> Correct
 For your reference, \'Dayiso\' is a kind of \'Unitop\' there. 

>> Correct
 That is all for today and see you later! ^^**

>> Correct

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·