Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Good afternoon and a great Tuesday to you as well!
Well, for me, I don\'t agree that people smoke or should smoke in public places.
They should think about the health of the second hand smokers or passive smokers like us.
Because smoking is more harmful to non-smokers.
Let\'s talk more about smoking later. ^^
See you!
_Teacher Dianne ^_^
Good afternoon, teacher!
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A great Tuesday to you!
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As non-smokers, we talked about smoking yesterday and I shared bad memories to you.
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I don\'t still understand why people like smoking, but I am trying to understand what they feel during smoking.
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I guess it is the same feeling with what I feel when drinking coffee.
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I can\'t stay away from coffee everyday and I can see it like an addiction to caffeine.
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However, at the least, drinking coffee doesn\'t harm anyone because it is just an private favorite food.
>> However, at the least, drinking coffee doesn\'t harm anyone because it is just a personal favorite drink.
On the other hand, smoking can make other people feel unpleasant so these days, there is a big argument between non-smokers and smokers.
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Do you agree that people smoke in public places?
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>> Or: Do you agree that people should smoke in public places?
Let\'s talk more about it and each country\'s smoking culture.
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See you soon! ^^**
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