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2017-03-30 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, teacher! A happy Thursday to you! Time really flies so fast. It is time to make a plan for the weekend. ^^ By the way, we talked about the 'living expenses' and it was interesting. Here in Korea, foods expenses are getting higher and higher so it makes us feel a big burden. As an example, a tray of eggs is 30 eggs and the price was about USD 4~5 before. However, because of AI (Avian Influenza), the price of it became double or triple. An egg is the most common ingredient for us so the reality that we can't have it to the fullest in contrast to the past is too bitter. Apart from it, people have tried to decrease their household expenses because of falling profits. It is related to our poor economic situation so somehow, I feel worried if this situation lasts longer. Let's keep on talking about the same topic today! ^^ See you soon!

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


A good day to you!

You\'re right, time really flies so fast that we couldn\'t notice it.

You plan early for the weekend. ^^

I\'ll do mine tomorrow.

See you later!


_Teacher Dianne ^_^


Good morning, teacher!

>> correct
 A happy Thursday to you! 

>> correct
 Time really flies so fast. 

>> correct
 It is time to make a plan for the weekend. ^^

>> correct
 By the way, we talked about the \'living expenses\' and it was interesting. 

>> correct
 Here in Korea, foods expenses are getting higher and higher so it makes us feel a big burden. 

>>  Here in Korea, food expenses are getting higher and higher so it becomes a big burden to us.  

>> Or: Food expenses in our country are continuously increasing so we feel a big burden.
 As an example, a tray of eggs is 30 eggs and the price was about USD 4~5 before. 

>> correct
 However, because of AI (Avian Influenza), the price of it became double or triple.

>> correct
 An egg is the most common ingredient for us so the reality that we can\'t have it to the fullest in contrast to the past is too bitter. 

>> The egg is the most common ingredient for us so the reality that we can\'t have it to the fullest in contrast to the past is too bitter.  (I think \"the\" is more appropriate article since you already mentioned about it.)
 Apart from it, people have tried to decrease their household expenses because of falling profits.

>> correct
 It is related to our poor economic situation so somehow, I feel worried if this situation lasts longer. 

>> correct
 Let\'s keep on talking about the same topic today! ^^

>> correct
 See you soon!

>> correct

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