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2017-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, teacher! The spring rain is falling now. This rain will push the spring coming earlier. By the way, we talked about the 'living expenses' for two days. In comparison to other people, my living expenses is not that high because I don't usually spend money only for me. Moreover, I don't drink alcohol and smoke so I don't need to allot money for myself. However, I don't know why my bank account is always empty. ^^;; Maybe, the high Engel coefficient would be one of the reasons why I am not comfortable. Salaries are staying the same but, the price for everything is going up. In the same vein, let's talk about 'Are you contented with your current life?'! See you very soon! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


Good afternoon to you and Happy Friday!

Maybe, it\'s about Engel\'s law why your bank account is empty. ^^

It\'s really hard to budget especially if your income is not enough to support yourself.

Planning will be a great help and knowing how to manage your expenses.

See you later!


_Teacher Dianne ^^

 

Good afternoon, teacher! 

>> correct
 The spring rain is falling now. 

>> correct
 This rain will push the spring coming earlier. 

>> correct

>> Or: This rain means spring is approaching earlier.
 By the way, we talked about the \'living expenses\' for two days. 

>> correct
 In comparison to other people, my living expenses is not that high because I don\'t usually spend money only for me. 

>> correct
 Moreover, I don\'t drink alcohol and smoke so I don\'t need to allot money for myself. 

>> correct
 However, I don\'t know why my bank account is always empty. ^^;;

>> correct (hahaha)
 Maybe, the high Engel coefficient would be one of the reasons why I am not comfortable. 

>> correct 
Salaries are staying the same but, the price for everything is going up. 

>> Salaries are staying the same, but the price of everything is going up. 

>> Or: Salaries stay the same, but the price of everything is increasing. 
 In the same vein, let\'s talk about \'Are you contented with your current life?\'!

>> correct
 See you very soon! ^^

>> correct

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