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2017-05-25 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, teacher! I finished reviewing and those are the sentences that I wrote down. *I go out of work at 2 PM. *It is a rainy season here in the Philippines. *We should go to the parents-in-law's house on big holidays first to worship the spirits. *We should adapt to the change in this society. *That can be applied if women don't work. *Both men and women work and earn money. *It is very difficult to be a woman in your country. *They are the head of the family so they tend to take the special treatment as granted. *Do men do household chores voluntarily? *Men should break a superiority complex. *Companies think that they can't fulfill their role because of mother's duties. *They end up being a housewife. *If you are a regular employee, can they still enforce you to resign from the company? *You can spend your quality time with your husband. Let's talk about 'Wedding culture' tomorrow! Have a good time for the rest of the day! ^^

강사 첨삭

Good after [이름]!

I am already excited to talk about wedding traditions in your country. Thank you for sharing interesting topics every day. I always look forward to talking with you. See you in class!^^

~Kelly^^ 

Good afternoon, teacher!

>> Correct.
 I finished reviewing and those are the sentences that I wrote down. 

>> Correct. 
*I go out of work at 2 PM. 

>> Correct. 
*It is a rainy season here in the Philippines. 

>> It is rainy season here in the Philippines.  
*We should go to the parents-in-law\'s house on big holidays first to worship the spirits. 

>> Correct. 
*We should adapt to the change in this society. 

>> Correct. 
*That can be applied if women don\'t work. 

>> Correct. 

OR:

>> That is applicable to women who don\'t work.
*Both men and women work and earn money.

>> Correct.
 *It is very difficult to be a woman in your country.

>> Correct.
*They are the head of the family. 

>> Correct. 
*Do men do household chores voluntarily? 

>> Correct.
*Men should break a superiority complex.

>> Men should break/get rid off \"superiority complex\".
*Companies think that they can\'t fulfill their role because of mother\'s duties. 

>> Correct.
*They end up being a housewife. 

>> Correct.
*If you are a regular employee, can they still enforce you to resign from the company? 

>> Correct.
*You can spend your quality time with your husband.
>> Correct.
Let\'s talk about \'Wedding culture\' tomorrow!

>> Correct.
 Have a good time for the rest of the day! ^^

>> Correct.

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