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2017-05-26 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, teacher! I forget to ask you about 'Martial law' in your country. I heard it from news and I am shocked about the reason why the President can't help but announced the martial law. The Islamic militia group is attacking Mindanao state and it seems like a very serious situation. Even if Mindanao is far from your city, I feel still worried about your situation. I hope nothing will happen to everyone. Finally, I am being diligent again. Please help me check them out. *People focus on the formalities. *Is it okay if I ask how much those couples spend for their wedding? *'Studio' indicates a place to have our wedding pictures taken. *The wedding venue is also very expensive. *Women have to buy home appliances. *I paid half the price of the house. *The groom's family pay for the wedding. *Some people still require a dowry in the country side. *You are not allowed to try on your wedding dress before the exact wedding day. I hope you have a wonderful weekend with your friend.^^ P.S.: The topic for the next class is 'A low birth rate'.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon [이름]!^^

Thank you so much for your concern about our situation here in the Philippines. I hope that the war will end soon because many people were hurt and killed already. And, I hope the government can control the situation there. Anyway, it\'s almost weekend, so enjoy your time with your husband and your friend.^^ Take care and have a great time!^^ Be safe always~

~Kelly^^ 

Good morning, teacher!

>> Correct.
I forget to ask you about \'Martial law\' in your country. 

>> I forgot to ask you about \'Martial law\' in your country. 
I heard it from news and I am shocked about the reason why the President can\'t help but announced the martial law. 

>> I heard it from the news and I am shocked about the reason why the President couldn\'t help but declare martial law. 
The Islamic militia group is attacking Mindanao state and it seems like a very serious situation. 

>> Correct.
Even if Mindanao is far from your city, I feel still worried about your situation. 

>> Even if Mindanao is far from your city, I still feel worried about your situation. 
I hope nothing will happen to everyone. 

>> Correct.
Finally, I am being diligent again. 

>> Correct.
Please help me check them out.

>> Please help me check these out.
*People focus on the formalities. 

>> People focus on the formalities of the occasion. 
*Is it okay if I ask how much those couples spend for their wedding? 

>> Correct.
*\'Studio\' indicates a place to have our wedding pictures taken. 

>> Correct.
*The wedding venue is also very expensive. 

>> Correct.
*Women have to buy home appliances.

>> Correct.
*I paid half the price of the house. 

>> Correct. 
*The groom\'s family pay for the wedding. 

>> The groom\'s family pays for the wedding. 
*Some people still require a dowry in the country side. 

>> Correct. 
*You are not allowed to try on your wedding dress before the exact wedding day.
>>
You are not allowed to try on your wedding dress before your exact wedding day. 

>> You are not allowed to try on your wedding dress before your wedding day.
I hope you have a wonderful weekend with your friend.^^

>> Correct. 
P.S.: The topic for the next class is \'A low birth rate\'.

>> P.S.: The topic for the next class is \'low birth rate\'.

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