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2017-05-30 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, teacher! Today't topic was very difficult for me to express in English, so my brain became blank. I don't know why I chose this topic. ^^;; I need more time to train myself to make a god conversation in English. ^^;; No matter how, I won't skip my daily homework. * I was amazed that artificial intelligence beat Mr.Lee on the Baduk game. * There is a premonition of defeat. * Our technology has great potential to be developed. * We call them 'toddler'. * Parents have an idea on how to discipline their children. * At what age should children be exposed to mobile phones? * Many young people get pregnant at such a young age * Is teenage pregnancy a problem? Finally, let't talk about 'table manners'! See you tomorrow!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

I am glad that no matter what happens, you will not skip doing your homework. Anyway, I am so proud of you because you challenge yourself to more discuss more difficult topics. Don\'t be sorry that you chose it because you were able to share a lot of great insights. You actually did a great job. Be proud of yourself!^^ See you tomorrow and let\'s talk about another interesting topic. :)

~Kelly^^

Good afternoon, teacher!

>> Correct.
Today\'t topic was very difficult for me to express in English, so my brain became blank.

>>Today\'s topic was very difficult, so I had a hard time expressing myself in English, and my brain went blank.
I don\'t know why I chose this topic. ^^;; 

>> Correct. 
I need more time to train myself to make a good conversation in English.^^;;

>> Correct.
No matter how, I won\'t skip my daily homework.
>> Correct.
*I was amazed that artificial intelligence beat Mr.Lee on the Baduk game. 

>> I was amazed that artificial intelligence beat Mr. [Name] on Baduk game. 
* There is a premonition of defeat. 

>> There was a premonition of defeat. 
* Our technology has great potential to be developed. 

>> Correct. 
* We call them \'toddler\'.

>> We call them \'toddlers\'.
* Parents have an idea on how to discipline their children. 

>> Correct. 
* At what age should children be exposed to mobile phones? 

>> Correct. 
* Many young people get pregnant at such a young age.

>> Correct. 
* Is teenage pregnancy a problem?
>> Correct. 
Finally, let\'t talk about \'table manners\'!

>> Correct. 

***let\'s
See you tomorrow!

>> Correct. 

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