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2018-11-28 · 첨삭 강사 Elisha

학생이 쓴 원문

Could there be another world war in the future? How can we prevent a world war from happening? ㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡㅡ I think the third world war can be triggered by North Korea. If North korea tries to fight with the US, there will be many contries to be involved in the fight. I guess we as South Korean also need to fight against North Korea then. I believe that the Korean peninsula will be totally destroyed, and also 80% of the globe will be ruined. It should not happen, I hope.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Sung Hoon! Thank you for doing your homework! Enjoy the rest of the day~!
-T. Elisha
I think the third world war can be triggered by North Korea.
>> I think the third world war may be triggered by North Korea.
If North korea tries to fight with the US, there will be many contries to be involved in the fight.
>>  If North korea tries to fight with the US, many countries will be involved.
I guess we as South Korean also need to fight against North Korea then.
>>  I guess we as South Koreans also need to fight against North Korea by then.
I believe that the Korean peninsula will be totally destroyed, and also 80% of the globe will be ruined.
>>  I believe that the Korean peninsula will be totally destroyed, and so will 80% of the globe be.
It should not happen, I hope.
>> I hope it won\'t happen.

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