Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
If people's genes, environment and television are the cause of people's criminality - is the person to blame? They are not responsible for any of these factors, so why do we punish them?
We don't need to care about the responsibility.
We can jus t make a judgement by their behavior that really took action.
Why should we consider the reason of crimes? It is not the society's responsibility.
강사 첨삭
Hey,
Is the crime rate high in your country? Which crime takes the top spot?
~Lynn
We don\'t need to care about the responsibility.
>>correct!
We can just make a judgement by their behavior that really took action.
>> We can just make judgments by their behavior and actions.
Why should we consider the reason of crimes? It is not the society\'s responsibility.
>> correct!
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