Composition
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In some countries having children is considered a way of "investing in the future",
and young people are expected to give money to their parents when they get a job,
and then to care for them when they retire.
What are the good points and what are the bad points about this system?
I think it cannot be called as a system.
It is natural to raise their kids for parents and support their old parents for workers.
It has been always human life during our history.
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I think it cannot be called as a system.
>> CORRECT GRAMMAR
It is natural to raise their kids for parents and support their old parents for workers.
>> It is a natural/responsibility of parents to raise their kids and for kids to support their parents when they got a job.
It has been always human life during our history.
>> It has always been a part of people\'s life even in the past.
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